Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Arkanian dragon

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Arkanian dragon

• Nominated by: BloodOfIrizi (talk) 17:44, 5 November 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:
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Support

1. We shall bring everything Zahn to status, nice to see progress on Thrawn SAs! Samonic ^(Talk) 09:45, 9 November 2022 (UTC)
2. —spookywilloww^talk 20:16, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
3. OOM 224 15:44, 11 November 2022 (UTC)
4. Copy-edit Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 21:30, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
5. - Thannus (DFaceG) (he/him) (talk) 22:13, 18 November 2022 (UTC)

Object

Samonic Bee

• (Review note) This article should have dating once Yakov's template is moved to the Template mainspace.
• Can Governor Pryce being a "Lothalian" be sourced to Thrawn? (I mean if we can source the people from Lothal being called Lothalians to Thrawn)
• "They shared their name" -> "They partially shared their name.
• "While on the ground" ground of what? The planet? If so, I would prefer you to say "on the planet" or "on the ground of the planet" (which is unnecessarily wordy)
• You should specify that Imperial Security Bureau = ISB when first mentioning the organization.
• Why did Pryce kill Gudry? Samonic ^(Talk) 16:00, 6 November 2022 (UTC)
  • got em BloodOfIrizi (talk) 18:44, 7 November 2022 (UTC)

Spooky

• I'm not sure so much of the conversation in 2 BBY is necessarily relevant to the dragons themselves. There's three sentences that don't mention the dragons, and the 4th is where it's finally mentioned. To me that could be trimmed up a bit to include less play-by-play, as a lot of it seems irrelevant to a species page.
• For Arkania—could it be said the that it's in the Colonies, for further context? Additionally, the page itself claims it's a planet according to Disciples of Harmony, which might suit better imho if that is verifiable.
• A point similar to the last but, is there a particular reason the Arkanians aren't said as having the same name, versus the world, which is only partially named after it?
• Echoing precedent, please provide full comic release date for the Legends comic.—spookywilloww^talk 22:45, 9 November 2022 (UTC)
  • got em all, lmk if more needs to be removed from the middle/context sentences BloodOfIrizi (talk) 23:32, 9 November 2022 (UTC)
    • As it is currently the last sentence still only seems marginally relevant. Did Pryce take particular offense to the dragon comment, with that being the reason to have Gudry killed? If it isn't particularly tied to the dragon content in such a way, might be better to remove that bit imho. Might also be worth shifting things around a bit to clarify whether the 'insurgency' was Batonn's insurgency or something happening elsewhere they had been sent there to gather intel on (though pipelinked, reading it without checking links leaves it quite ambiguous).—spookywilloww^talk 01:39, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
      • how's that? BloodOfIrizi (talk) 16:35, 10 November 2022 (UTC)

Thrawn

• It should be specified that it is a Dragon (creature). -ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 22:58, 9 November 2022 (UTC)
  • got it BloodOfIrizi (talk) 23:19, 9 November 2022 (UTC)
• Note I added Category:Dragons. (btw category:dragons is conteriuntivitly not in category:flying creatures, so don't remove category:flying creatures) -ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 01:24, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
  • sounds good BloodOfIrizi (talk) 01:25, 10 November 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 18:24, 20 November 2022 (UTC)