Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Abran Balfour

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Abran Balfour

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Support

  1. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 19:26, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
  2. ECvote OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 19:49, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
  3. Cumulonimbus Cloud (Talk) 10:25, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
  4. ECvote UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 10:39, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
  5. ECvote Imperators II(Talk) 09:02, 19 April 2021 (UTC)

Object

Fan
  • "Leia Organa told fellow member of the Alliance Luke Skywalker". "fellow Alliance member" is less wordy. Fan26 (Talk) 18:14, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
Imp
  • I'm assuming you can say that Balfour's forces, as opposed to the Moff himself personally, patrolled the hyperlane.
    • Clarified.
  • The wording you use is somewhat unclear. Was the fleet stationed in the sector Balfour governed? Or near the sector? If the latter, why would Organa warn Skywalker about the fleet being present in the sector? Did the fleet enter that sector? Imperators II(Talk) 09:42, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Balfour represented the Imperial presence nearest the location of the Rebel fleet at the time. Luke was told not to give him the idea that the fleet was near his sector when he entered the Llanic system, which I have added that he did. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH(Talk) 17:18, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
      • The way you explain it here sounds much clearer, can you integrate that into the article? The sentence you added at the end is certainly relevant info but doesn't really helps much with explaining the awkward wording. Imperators II(Talk) 22:17, 18 April 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 09:02, 19 April 2021 (UTC)