Wookieepedia:Re-featured article nominations/Tig Fromm

Tig Fromm

• Originally nominated by: Green tentacle
• Last featured on: March 24, 2008
• Changes since last review: diff
• Date placed on this page: September 22, 2011

(2 Inqs/2 Users/4 Total)

Support

1. Bully! Just bully. Menkooroo 03:56, October 2, 2011 (UTC)
2. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 04:56, January 24, 2012 (UTC)
3. —Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 03:44, January 26, 2012 (UTC)
4. Hanzo Hasashi 06:02, January 31, 2012 (UTC)

Object

1. Droids!
   • The intro could definitely use some expansion. The small paragraph at the end doesn't seem proportionate to the four sections from the cartoon. Stuff like "Through a series of misadventures" could potentially be elaborated on, too.
     • Expanded. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 16:25, September 25, 2011 (UTC)
   • Since the cartoon and the comic hint at his early failures, could they provide a quote for "early life?" Menkooroo 06:57, September 22, 2011 (UTC)
     • There was a suitable one from the comic already in the next section and a rather lengthy one from the cartoon. I've moved the comic one to "early life" and added another comic quote for "the ultimate weapon." Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 16:25, September 25, 2011 (UTC)
   • Just a few more minor ones: Some of "Power Play" reads more from the perspective of the heroes than it does from Fromm. After being interrogated by Fromm and Oncard, Dusat was scheduled to be transferred to Sise Fromm's stronghold on Annoo... kind of reads like something out of Dusat's bio --- for an article about Fromm, can this info be led by a note that Fromm brought Dusat into his office and interrogated him, rather than leading with Dusat as the central subject?
     • Try that. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:29, September 26, 2011 (UTC)
   • Similarly, the account of the escape from the base kind of reads more like a recount of the heroes' actions with a few side mentions of what Fromm is doing. Can you do some slight rewording so that Fromm is front and center, noticing and stewing over the good guys' actions and such? Does that make sense?
     • And that. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:29, September 26, 2011 (UTC)
   • The bit about Joben's interrogation in "The Fall of the Fromm Gang" doesn't mention Tig --- is Tig the one interrogating him?
     • Yes. Should be clear now. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:29, September 26, 2011 (UTC)
   • I think the second paragraph of this section could use some expansion --- Tig goes from Ingo to Annoo to Ingo to Annoo over the course of two sentences, and a number of necessary details are left out. What do they depart for Annoo on? Where on Annoo do they go? Does Tig bring Joben before his father? What exactly is Oncard in tow in? Are they flying the Trigon One during the second trip to Annoo? Is Sise with them, or is Tig speaking to him over the phone?
     • Have a look. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:29, September 26, 2011 (UTC)
   • On that note, I'm wondering if there's some general expansion that can be done throughout the the biography (and possibly P&T). I know that Kea has a larger role in the episodes as one of the good guys, but even so, looking at the length of her article, I can't help but wonder if there's more to say about Tig. This one is a question rather than an objection. Lemme know.
     • There was a little in the biography, but not much. Still got to go over P&T and there's probably a bit more for BTS to come. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 20:53, September 27, 2011 (UTC)
       • All done. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 21:39, October 1, 2011 (UTC)
   • Fromm succeeded in damaging the engine on the Sand Sloth --- where are they? Some context is needed on this battle. Menkooroo 07:19, September 26, 2011 (UTC)
     • Expanded that part and contextified. Green Tentacle ^(Talk) 20:53, September 27, 2011 (UTC)

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