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Second Battle of Borleias
Things to do
- Conform article to layout prescribed in the LG for battles
- General expansion and explanation:
- Example: "Additionally, other familiar tactics such as yammosk jamming, stutter firing, and Jedi shadow bombs were also employed."
- Prelude and aftermath sections are unbalanced and do not provide proper context or follow-through
- While parenthetical statements are not necessarily evil, this one is: "Due to Borleias' proximity to Coruscant (or Yuuzhan'tar, as it was now called)"
- Unsourced statements in BTS:
- "The Second Battle of Borleias was mentioned several times in later New Jedi Order books"; "References in other works have also been made to Battle of Borleias, an in-universe documentary produced by Wolam Tser about the course of the battle."
- Check for new information not presently found in the article from glossed-over sources in BTS, especially for the 'aftermath' of the battle.
- Many paragraphs under "Arrival of Czulkang Lah" and especially "Second offensive" are extremely short and should probably be merged with each other. General rewrite is advised.
Removal of FA status
- Placed on probation at Meeting 39.
- Sent to redux per Meeting 40.
- FA status revoked on November 9, 2012 following failed redux. Menkooroo (talk) 01:12, November 9, 2012 (UTC)
Redux review
Comments
- Article was more or less rewritten. BTS was sourced, Aftermath and Prelude sections fixed and expanded. Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 20:57, February 12, 2011 (UTC) - If it keeps its FA status, it should be added to the FA queue to be re-featured. Menkooroo 08:18, June 19, 2011 (UTC)
