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Atton Rand

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Support

  1. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Audience Chamber) 01:37, 8 April 2007 (UTC)
  2. .... 23:27, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
  3. --Eyrezer 06:56, 13 June 2007 (UTC)
  4. Jaina Solo(Talk) 17:16, 14 June 2007 (UTC)
  5. Gonk (Gonk!) 01:46, 22 June 2007 (UTC)

Things to do

  • Lengthen pathetic intro. -Solus (Bird of Prey) 20:18, 25 March 2007 (UTC)
  • Needs more images. Needs sectioning. Needs more prose- though that may be hard. Could use a relationships section with Exile. A full body shot needs to go in there somewhere. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Audience Chamber) 03:45, 27 March 2007 (UTC)
    • Good work, though some of it seems to be a bit speculative now a la "a rather suggestive comment." Also, I'm unsure of how much of Atton's actions/dialogue choices with Exile are actually "canon." Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Audience Chamber) 16:36, 29 March 2007 (UTC)
      • The discussion has been settled, but I am unaware as to what I am supposed to actually do about it, if anything. Could I be informed? -Solus (Bird of Prey) 18:30, 7 April 2007 (UTC)

*Can I get some clarificatoins in the text? (Copied from FA nom page)

    • The intro contains info that needs to be put into the biography, such as his Echani training.
    • In the 3rd paragraph of the bio, it is unclear whether Atton actually killed the Jedi woman. It jumps straight to his later comments.
    • Secondly, I think the appearance of Kreia on Peragus needs some more context. **Also, if some information can be added to "when that mess was cleared up" to detail how they got out.
    • The article jumps straight into the Exile wanting to find out why she was banished without having previously mentioning she had been banished or that she'd lost the Force.
    • I also think some of the he was thinking highly of her etc needs to be changed. The developing attraction to the Exile should be more explicit.
    • The encounter with Michal needs to be in the main text also.
    • What other key worlds did the group then travel to?
    • In the final line of the biography, "Atton and the other" is awkward.

--Eyrezer 03:51, 22 May 2007 (UTC)

Remove Objection

Objection 1

I think that another image, preferably one from the game, would look better in the infobox.--Doquis(HoloConference) 12:24, 1 April 2007 (UTC) Keep

Remove

  1. More of a preference. --Eyrezer 23:48, 4 June 2007 (UTC)
  2. Indeed. Gonk (Gonk!) 01:47, 22 June 2007 (UTC)

Comments

I haven't started work on it yet, I was just wondering what needs to be worked on. I know sourcing is one of them, but I'll work on that in a sec. -Solus (Bird of Prey) 19:54, 25 March 2007 (UTC)

  • Sourced it, and I also noted how pathetic the intro is. Will fix soon. -Solus (Bird of Prey) 20:18, 25 March 2007 (UTC)
    • Did an overhaul, which lengthened the intro, added a talents and romance section, better sectioned the article, added several images (including a full-body), and added prose. Does this satisfy? -Solus (Bird of Prey) 03:52, 28 March 2007 (UTC)
      • Ah, okay. I'll take out the quote mentioned. What actions/dialogue choices are you referring to, and what should I do about them? -Solus (Bird of Prey) 17:45, 29 March 2007 (UTC)
        • The whole ambiguity of KotOR storylines seems to be a significant issue that the Inquisitorius needs to address, and I'll have it brought up at the upcoming meeting. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Audience Chamber) 15:14, 30 March 2007 (UTC)
  • Hey, if we can get Inq approval on this, it can be moved to queue. Atarumaster88 14:40, 18 May 2007 (UTC)