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Zilaash Kuh

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 20:08, 2 May 2009 (UTC)
  2. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 10:53, 5 May 2009 (UTC)
  3. PIEman, I think I like the sound of that. Kilson Likes PIE 01:09, 07 May 09 (UTC)
  4. ACvote So clean! Graestan(Talk) 02:17, 8 May 2009 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 14:35, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
  6. IFYLOFD (You will pay the price for your lack of vision!) 16:33, 9 May 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. Attack of the Clone
    • In the intro, why did the Alliance seek to capture Horn?
      • Addressed.
    • Coruscant needs context.
      • The first mention in the bio already does.
    • "Kuh also did not have a criminal record" sounds too trivial, and too out of the blue. Please try to fit this better into the P&T, or else remove it if it's irrelevant.
      • Removed.
    • "she piloted with Nyz in his flatbed cargo hauler": even if there were two pilots for the speeder, it's a bit confusing. Please try to reword this.
      • Is this better?
    • Looking good. CC7567 (talk) 19:15, 2 May 2009 (UTC)
  2. Soresu
    • She seemed to see herself in a slightly superior light compared with others, especially the Jedi Order, whose popularity had fallen in the public eye in light of recent events. Try to avoid using light twice.
      • Addressed.
    • The P&T should also summarize any skills she had eg. ability to use certain weapons, fly vehicles etc. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 11:03, 4 May 2009 (UTC)
  3. Bumrushin' the Show with IFYLOFD:
    • Is it stated in Outcast that few non-Force sensitives could wield a lightsaber? Because if not, you'll have to either source it and the rest of the article or just remove it outright. Other than that, looking good. IFYLOFD (You will pay the price for your lack of vision!) 04:34, 5 May 2009 (UTC)
    • There are several lines that imply this, such as:
Oric Harfard: "Who was the female Jedi, the one who rescued him from Dhidal Nyz?"
Corran Horn: "We don't know her identity. We don't know that she was a Jedi."
Oric Harfard: "She was using a lightsaber!"
―Captain Harfard and Corran Horn, on Zilaash Kuh[src]
The main problem, though, is that it is never outright stated that she is non-Force-sensitive, so I can't really put that in the article; only that she was one of the few non-Jedi/Sith. If you think I should remove it, though, I will. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi beacon) 11:13, 5 May 2009 (UTC)
Reworded and removed. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi beacon) 02:39, 8 May 2009 (UTC)

The "PIEman's" review

  1. Give some context to crushguants in the Bio section.
    • Added.
  2. You should tell why she lost Horn in the intro.
    • Done.
  3. Other than that, looks good. Kilson Likes PIE 07 May 09 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:22, 18 May 2009 (UTC)