Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Zek Peiro

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Zek Peiro

  • Nominated by: RattsT (talk) 23:01, January 20, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:My first nomination! Let me know how to improve please!

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. UberSoldat93 (talk) 21:25, February 7, 2020 (UTC)
  2. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:45, February 9, 2020 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Nice job. 1358 (Talk) 18:31, March 11, 2020 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Fantastic job handling objections. Hope to see more nominations from you. :D MasterCommerce GuildFredcerique 01:13, March 12, 2020 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Good work! TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:56, March 14, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Spooky
  • Hi, welcome to the GAN. To start, he would need an Equipment section detailing his clothes and the holstered blaster he's got.
    • Added. I don't think his blaster is a named model, but I could be wrong. RattsT (talk) 23:41, January 20, 2020 (UTC)
  • Coruscant being a planet can't be sourced to the comic, and would need an additional reference note.
    • Sourced. RattsT (talk) 23:41, January 20, 2020 (UTC)
  • In Skills, it would be worth mentioning his thievery skills and adeptness with blaster combat.
    • Added. RattsT (talk) 23:41, January 20, 2020 (UTC)
  • I think the P&T could be expanded to further detail his personality, in his interactions with others we see.—spookywillowwtalk 23:12, January 20, 2020 (UTC)
    • Added. RattsT (talk) 23:41, January 20, 2020 (UTC)
  • 'By 32 BBY' in infobox exclusive; that could be worked into the body.
    • Added. RattsT (talk) 01:51, January 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • There's still a page or two of Maul being reprimanded for Peiro's death, which should be noted.—spookywillowwtalk 01:30, January 21, 2020 (UTC)
    • Added a Legacy subsection. RattsT (talk) 01:51, January 21, 2020 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • "Kaitis Cartel" should link to the organization's page in the intro instead of two separate links, see this section on the Manual of Style for details.
  • It would be good to add where the blaster is holstered. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:53, January 21, 2020 (UTC)
    • Fixed both. RattsT (talk) 16:56, January 21, 2020 (UTC)
Zed
  • Peiro should have enough dialogue to be able to add a quote to the Personality and traits section. Zed42 (talk) 08:51, January 22, 2020 (UTC)
    • Added. RattsT (talk) 09:02, January 22, 2020 (UTC)
Fred strikes back
  • Could we also get the year mentioned in the intro? In fact, the intro itself can be expanded. It's a tad short.
  • The body should start with his full name. In terms of using the last name only after the first mention, we don't count the intro as the first mention.
  • I will continue my review later. Welcome to the GAN! MasterCommerce GuildFredcerique 22:22, January 24, 2020 (UTC)
    • Expanded the intro a little. How's it look? RattsT (talk) 22:50, January 24, 2020 (UTC)
      • Much better.
  • The more I think about it, the more I feel you should say something more along the lines of, "Prior to the Invasion of Naoo in 32 BBY," or something. Saying "by 32 BBY" makes it seem more like the events happened in 32 BBY. This will also require a rewrite of the reference note currently used for the date.
  • The second paragraph of "Working for the 'Kaitis Cartel'" has a lot of short sentences, making the flow pretty choppy. See if you can rearrange things to combine multiple thoughts into a single sentence and better the flow. MasterCommerce GuildFredcerique 02:15, January 27, 2020 (UTC)
    • Addressed both. RattsT (talk) 03:04, January 28, 2020 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • For starters, the character's hair isn't just blond. The comic illustrations clearly show he has blond highlights and darker hair in the back, or however you may want to describe that. This should be reflected in the infobox and article body. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 09:48, February 19, 2020 (UTC)
    • Addressed. RattsT (talk) 06:01, February 25, 2020 (UTC)
Ecks
  • "Peiro's performance in the theft convinced Maul of his power." This single-clause sentence stands out a bit, see if you could perhaps merge it with the following sentence.
  • The MoS mandates that grammatical articles such as a not be placed inside pipelinks.
  • You say twice that Maul hired Peiro to do something. Aside from the repetitiveness, you should probably reword the second instance to be from Peiro's perspective rather than Maul's.
  • In the intro, you say that he was considered by many to be one of the best thieves, whereas in the P&A, you say that he was one of the best. How does the source present this? 1358 (Talk) 18:32, March 10, 2020 (UTC)
    • Addressed the first three objections. As for the last, Maul says "I've heard tales of this Zek Peiro. A thief for hire. Many say the best on Coruscant." I was taking his word for it. RattsT (talk) 22:45, March 10, 2020 (UTC)
      • If that's the case, you should probably present it that way in the P&A as well. 1358 (Talk) 18:08, March 11, 2020 (UTC)
        • Does it not already say that? Or should I note that it was specifically Maul who thought so? RattsT (talk) 18:15, March 11, 2020 (UTC)
          • I think there's a difference between saying that he was among the best thieves on Coruscant, compared to him being "considered by many" to be the best. 1358 (Talk) 18:17, March 11, 2020 (UTC)
            • Alright. It's already mentioned a few times that he's good anyway, so I changed the wording. RattsT (talk) 18:26, March 11, 2020 (UTC)
              • Works for me. 1358 (Talk) 18:31, March 11, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:56, March 14, 2020 (UTC)