Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Wenton Chan/Legends

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Wenton Chan

  • Nominated by: Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 18:29, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: In amongst all the Outcast and TCW noms, I bring you a nom from the film that started it all.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Good work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jujiggum) 22:06, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Nice job, Cav. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 23:18, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
  3. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 00:14, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Graestan(Talk) 16:11, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
  5. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 09:36, 21 May 2009 (UTC)
  6. Great!—Darthtyler (Talk) 00:18, 24 May 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. The Grand Master needs a break from his Outcast noms
    • "Chan was part of the Rebel starfighter forces mobilized to attack the Death Star, the Galactic Empire's planet-destroying superweapon, once it became clear that the moon on Yavin 4—where Yavin Base was located—was its next target." This reads somewhat awkwardly, please reword/rearrange.
      • Done.
    • The first few sentences of the second paragraph under the bio section are out of chronnological order. You open by saying the Empire has discovered Yavin Base, and then you go back and say that they planted a homing beacon on the Millennium Falcon.
      • I set up the situation, then explained how it was done. It doesn't have to be in order to explain what is going on.
    • "The crew and passengers of the Falcon—including smuggler Han Solo and his Wookiee partner Chewbacca, Jedi Knight Obi-Wan Kenobi and farmboy Luke Skywalker—had conducted the rescue of Princess Leia Organa, Alderaan's former Senator and high ranking member of the Rebel Alliance, from the Death Star, and had fled to Yavin Base with the plans to the new battlestation." This needs to be reworded, and should also probably be broken up into two sentences.
      • Rewritten.
    • "Chan, along with the rest of Red Squadron under the commander of Garven Dreis, launched in his T-65 X-wing starfighter." This implies that the whole squadron launched in Chan's starfighter, and "under the commander of Garven Dreis" should be reworded.
    • Jonjedigrandmaster (Jujiggum) 19:38, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
  2. Attack of the Clone
    • "Chan volunteered to join the Alliance to Restore the Republic, joining their starfighter corps": please replace one of the "join"s.
      • Done.
    • "Chan, along with the rest of Red Squadron under the command of Garven Dreis, launched in their T-65 X-wing starfighters." I saw Jon's objection above, but I think this sentence can be reworded for better clarity. Technically, it should be "his" X-wing, but since that implies what Jon mentioned above, it just needs rewording.
    • That's it; looks fine otherwise. CC7567 (talk) 23:56, 18 May 2009 (UTC)

Comments

  • Yes, the image is crappy. I've asked Darth Culator to provide a replacement for it. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 18:29, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
  • Checked ANH novel, comic for quote inclusion? Also, Behind the Magic and Annotated Screenplays should be included in Source list. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:02, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
    • Both novel and comic do not refer to Red Eleven in any way. I could put them in as indirect references since the squadron is present and he was known to be part at that time (although both sources refer to the squadron as Blue Squadron, per the original screenplay). Other sources added. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:51, 18 May 2009 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:08, 25 May 2009 (UTC)