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WED-15-I662
- Nominated by: Darth Morrt 12:16, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Another Treadwell
(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)
Support
Kilson(Let's have a chat) 03:05, July 18, 2011 (UTC)- Grand Moff Tranner
(Comlink) 20:55, July 20, 2011 (UTC) - Talrrivanian
(Headquarters) - —Tommy 9281 Wednesday, August 3, 2011, 15:06 UTC
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:09, August 3, 2011 (UTC)
Object
Kilson
In the Intro, "Soon afterwards, Imperial sandtroopers, who were searching for the Rebel droids, boarded the vehicle, and after they didn't found them, they destroyed the crawler." The phrasing of this sentence is a little odd, specially because of the grammar issues and the use of the pronouns. Please try to rephrase this.In the Bio, you should ref first mention of the droid's name to the CSWE entry because that's where its name was first identified with the second hyphen."...I662 was aboard a Jawa sandcrawler possessed by Chief Nebit's clan, when the scavengers captured the Rebel astromech droid R2-D2 in the Jawa Canyon of planet Tatooine." You should also mention C-3P0 in this sentence like you did in the Intro.You should make it clear in the Bio that the Imperials were looking for the Death Star plans, which you didn't state clearly. Also, make it clear that the Imperials destroyed the crawler after they didn't find the plans.Couldn't you had the category "Tatooinians" like you did with your other WEB nom.- Otherwise, looks good. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 01:49, July 17, 2011 (UTC)
- All fixed. Thanks for the quick review. Darth Morrt 09:49, July 17, 2011 (UTC)
Moffship
"In 0 BBY, during the Galactic Civil War, the droid traveled aboard a Jawa sandcrawler, whose passengers later captured the Rebel droids R2-D2 and C-3PO." - I don't know if "traveled" and "passengers" are appropriate words to use here. "Traveled" implies that the droid was using the sandcrawler as a temporary means of transportation, and technically the "passengers" of the vehicle were the droids, not the Jawas.- Reworded. Darth Morrt 19:08, July 19, 2011 (UTC)
"During the auction, I662 was about to leave the droid prison of the crawler..." - Very minor, but does the referenced source really use the term "droid prison"? It doesn't seem appropriate here, imo.- Yes, it does: "Primary ore hold converted into droid prison". Darth Morrt 19:08, July 19, 2011 (UTC)
"...typical of the thousands of droids that repaired and maintained heavy machinery and starfighters." - This phrase, which you source to the New Essential Guide to Droids, is taken verbatim from the CSWE. It needs to be reworded, and the reference should be changed.- The text is originally from the CCG card. Reworded. Referenced properly. Darth Morrt 19:08, July 19, 2011 (UTC)
Now that sentence is somewhat confusing. The grammar is incorrect, for one. Also, how could he be a "standard class five droid" if not all class five droids are Treadwells?Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 02:05, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
- Reworded. Darth Morrt 09:24, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
- The text is originally from the CCG card. Reworded. Referenced properly. Darth Morrt 19:08, July 19, 2011 (UTC)
"I662 was especially good at keeping droids, vehicles, and starfighters from breaking down." As far as I can tell, these are gameplay statistics from the CCG and should not be incorporated in the article.- IMO, if a game stat has real-world meaning, it is canon. For example, an RPG character who has Pilot ability, is considered to be a pilot. I've done this with Nahdonnis Praji too, when I "translated" his ability into real-world meaning. Darth Morrt 19:08, July 19, 2011 (UTC)
I'm going to have to disagree with you. Just because this issue slipped through the cracks once doesn't mean it warrants the use of this information in other articles. This is an all-or-nothing situation. Surely I'm not going to edit the 2X-3KPR article to mention that the droid gives an alien +2 power during the night.Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 02:05, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
- Cut. Darth Morrt 09:24, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
- IMO, if a game stat has real-world meaning, it is canon. For example, an RPG character who has Pilot ability, is considered to be a pilot. I've done this with Nahdonnis Praji too, when I "translated" his ability into real-world meaning. Darth Morrt 19:08, July 19, 2011 (UTC)
- I'll give the article another review once these objections are handled. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 16:09, July 19, 2011 (UTC)
Please provide ref names for references 6, 7, and 8.Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 15:48, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
- Done. Darth Morrt 16:55, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
Talrrivanian
In the intro, the word "droids" is used waay to much.- Droids eliminated. Darth Morrt 00:39, July 31, 2011 (UTC)
In the bio, "scavengers" is unlinked.- If I might interject, that goes under the {{Sofixit}} rule. If there's something relatively easy that you can readily fix, like linking, you can do it yourself instead of objecting about it. I've gone ahead and done it myself this time, but please remember this in the future Talrrivanian. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 17:01, July 30, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks. Darth Morrt 00:39, July 31, 2011 (UTC)
- If I might interject, that goes under the {{Sofixit}} rule. If there's something relatively easy that you can readily fix, like linking, you can do it yourself instead of objecting about it. I've gone ahead and done it myself this time, but please remember this in the future Talrrivanian. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 17:01, July 30, 2011 (UTC)
In the "Characteristics" section, the word "droids" is also used to much. Otherwise, good.--Talrrivanian (Headquarters) 14:19, July 30, 2011 (UTC)
- Fixed. Darth Morrt 00:39, July 31, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:12, August 3, 2011 (UTC)