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Vul Isen
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- Nomination comments: Legacy noms seem to be all the rage.
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Glad you got to him before I did. Grand Moff Tranner 
(Comlink) 12:10, 2 February 2009 (UTC)- Copy that Grand Moff.—Tommy
(Nine two eight one) 23:13, 2 February 2009 (UTC) - Grunny (Talk) 09:20, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
- I like the article, but is it just me or are there a bunch of One Sith articles becoming GA Kilson 08:49, 08 February 09 (UTC)
- Cylka-talk- 22:19, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
Object
- From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
Probably needs a spoiler tag, especially if you have info from Legacy 33.- Yeah, I thought that too, but I wasn't really sure what sort of tag to use. {{Spoiler}} wouldn't really apply, afaik. Let me know what you think.
- {{Spoiler}} should be enough, at the top of the page. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 20:17, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
- Okay, done. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:48, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
- {{Spoiler}} should be enough, at the top of the page. Grand Moff Tranner
- Yeah, I thought that too, but I wasn't really sure what sort of tag to use. {{Spoiler}} wouldn't really apply, afaik. Let me know what you think.
The "Imperial Aquatic Transport" is in fact the Aquatic Terrain Armored Transport; that link and any further mentions should be changed to show this.- Interesting use of that. Changed, though all the further mentions only say "transport" so they should be fine. Btw, I'd consider this something that would definitely fall under {{Sofixit}}.
- Right, but I brought it up here, just to make sure you knew. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 20:17, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
- Right, but I brought it up here, just to make sure you knew. Grand Moff Tranner
- Interesting use of that. Changed, though all the further mentions only say "transport" so they should be fine. Btw, I'd consider this something that would definitely fall under {{Sofixit}}.
I'd like to see an expansion on the attack on the Sea Lion; specifically, Treis Sinde's involvement. I have a feeling he'll play a major role in opposing Isen and Azard's plans.- I omitted it because it's not particularly relevant, but mainly because neither Azard nor Isen mention Sinde, implying they don't know of his involvement. If and when Sinde becomes relevant to Isen, he'll obviously be properly introduced.
- Far enough. Assuming this will pass before Legacy 33 comes out, I trust you will do so. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 20:17, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
- Far enough. Assuming this will pass before Legacy 33 comes out, I trust you will do so. Grand Moff Tranner
- I omitted it because it's not particularly relevant, but mainly because neither Azard nor Isen mention Sinde, implying they don't know of his involvement. If and when Sinde becomes relevant to Isen, he'll obviously be properly introduced.
The growing tension between Isen and Azard should probably be mentioned in the intro.- Done.
- Well done. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 14:22, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
- Thank you, and thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:08, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
- Tommy Bombassa:
"Darth Wyyrlok, Krayt's right hand man, " I think right hand man should be changed to something a tad more formal.- Is there a more formal title? I could say he's a Sith Master, but that's less informative and doesn't show his relationship/status with Krayt. If there's a title for what he does for Krayt I'd be happy to go with that, but in the absence of one I don't see a problem with "right hand man."
- I was thinking along the lines of advisor, something to that degree.—Tommy (Nine two eight one) 23:59, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
- I don't think "advisor" is any more formal than "right hand man," and it's certainly less informative, so I'd rather stick to that—I wouldn't particularly mind if you changed it yourself, though. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:04, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
- I was thinking along the lines of advisor, something to that degree.—Tommy
- Is there a more formal title? I could say he's a Sith Master, but that's less informative and doesn't show his relationship/status with Krayt. If there's a title for what he does for Krayt I'd be happy to go with that, but in the absence of one I don't see a problem with "right hand man."
"—alchemically bioengineered Sithspawn created by the oldest Dark Jedi" Please be more specific as to these "oldest Dark Jedi." Are they the oldest living, or the oldest ever, or what?- Good point; added.
The absence of a p&a is rather conspicuous. At least a mention of his ability to invoke the Force and wake the beast would be prudent.- I wouldn't say it's conspicuous, since we really don't see him do all that much. I've added a paragraph outlining his abilities in the P&T, anyway.
- Cool.—Tommy (Nine two eight one) 23:59, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
- Cool.—Tommy
- I wouldn't say it's conspicuous, since we really don't see him do all that much. I've added a paragraph outlining his abilities in the P&T, anyway.
- Not bad.—Tommy (Nine two eight one) 16:00, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
- Cylka:
Because Krayt wanted only the Mon Calamari and not any of the world's other inhabitants targeted, Isen was unable to use his experimental viral organisms which would reduce the planet to a desolate swamp world, so instead he turned to ancient Sith lore and alchemically engineered a Sea Leviathan, the first of its kind adapted for underwater use. - This sentence is a bit long. I think it would be better to break it up a bit.- Broken up.
A little more context is needed on the Massacre of Mon Calamari. Why did Krayt order this extermination of the Mon Calamari species?- Personally, I wouldn't say any more is needed - it's not particularly relevant to Isen. I've added in a little bit in the bio, anyway.
Maybe mention that Isen was Force-sensitive in the introduction.- Done.
- Pretty interesting character, and a good read. Cylka-talk- 08:24, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks, and thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 11:58, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
Comments
- It's well over a thousand words, but I was going to go through GA first and then FA after the next issue comes out (in which he will inevitably get killed by his own creation). -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:29, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:19, 8 February 2009 (UTC)