Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Vistis Garn

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Vistis Garn

• Nominated by: Cade Calrayn 19:36, August 9, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Purple Greedo!

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 00:26, August 22, 2012 (UTC)
2. His name's Greedo. Vistis Greedo. Winterz (talk) 00:36, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
3. RIP Greedo. 501st dogma^(talk) 21:49, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
4. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 08:31, September 12, 2012 (UTC)
5. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:28, September 18, 2012 (UTC)
6. Hi JangFett ^(Talk) 02:06, October 21, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Winterz

• As there is already the usage of "3,641 BBY" a phrase before, wouldn't it look better in the second paragraphe, something like "Around the same year" instead of "3,641 BBY" again? :)
  • 3,643 BBY, actually. Fixed.
• Isn't there a better picture? One more of a 'profile picture' instead of the whole crouched body? It would look a lot better. Winterz (talk) 21:09, August 9, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nope, unfortunately. Cade Calrayn 22:40, August 9, 2012 (UTC)
    • Tell me what you think about the new one. There's no such thing as "NO"! ;) Winterz (talk) 00:13, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
      • Good work! Cade Calrayn 00:31, September 8, 2012 (UTC)

Exiled Jedi

• You didn't source the hair field of the infobox.
  • Done.
• Could you provide some context on Nar Shaadaa and the Migrant Merchant's Guild in the introduction.
  • Done.
    • Is it "smuggler's moon" or "Smuggler's Moon" You have it one way in the intro and the other way in the bio.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 18:24, August 13, 2012 (UTC)
      • That "smuggler's" in the intro slipped past me—it's just "moon of Nar Shaddaa".
• In the intorduction could you mention that the Black Sun hired him?
• How about an article for the Guild warehouse?
  • Blarg.
• When do you see/hear that those other people are members of his team?
  • Eh. Vague-ified.
    • Are any of these guys notable enough to have an article?--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 18:24, August 13, 2012 (UTC)
      • No, they're all carbon-copies of NPC enemies for each of their species.
• Did Garn fight the player? If he participated in the combat you should probably mention it in the body.
  • It's already mentioned within the game mechanics section.
    • Sorry, missed that.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 18:24, August 13, 2012 (UTC)
• "A purple-eyed Rodian male with bluish-purple skin, Vistis Garn was a prime example of a scoundrel." This sentence makes it seem like being a purple-eyed Rodian male makes you a scoundrel. I might cut the part about him being a prime example of a scoundrel since it seems a little point-of-view.
  • Done.
• Just to let you know, you don't need to link things twice in the body. You linked some things in the biography and again in the personality and traits section. I fixed it, but I thought I should let you know.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 16:47, August 12, 2012 (UTC)
  • Huh. Didn't even notice that was there. Thanks. Cade Calrayn 18:00, August 13, 2012 (UTC)

Cav

• Articles for the theft of the plans and raid on the Republic warehouse? - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 11:38, September 4, 2012 (UTC)
  • Same event, and yes. Cade Calrayn 20:23, September 7, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:06, October 21, 2012 (UTC)