- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.
Viper Sensor Intelligence Systems
- Nominated by:
AV-6R7Crew Pit 01:27, December 30, 2017 (UTC) - Nomination comments: I’ve always liked these old HoloNet articles; fanwank to the max. Original nomination can be found here.
(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
Ayrehead02 (talk) 20:16, January 24, 2018 (UTC)- grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 05:10, February 22, 2018 (UTC)
- Jinzler (talk) 23:14, March 5, 2018 (UTC)
Object
Ayrehead
I think the intro should definitely be expanded beyond one sentence.Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:09, December 30, 2017 (UTC)Could you describe their logo in description?Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:09, December 30, 2017 (UTC)You should mention in the body that the HoloNet News story is called "Sensor Technology Dispute Settled in Takeover" in order to give context to the quote captions.Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:24, January 1, 2018 (UTC)It's also worth mentioning that they employed at least one Vulptereen.Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:24, January 1, 2018 (UTC)- Now mentioned in caption. -
AV-6R7Crew Pit 20:28, January 6, 2018 (UTC)
- That info shouldn't be caption exclusive and actually looking at the AAD-4 assault droid page you should include that it was 60 of those droids that marched into the tower and destroyed their security units. The three tanks destroying the administration and accounting divisions of Viper also seems relevant. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:34, January 7, 2018 (UTC)
- Now mentioned in caption. -
I'd say that the history section is now long enough to split into three paragraphs. I'd also maybe move the image down into it.Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:34, January 20, 2018 (UTC)
Jinzler
In the "Description" section it is mentioned that Rina Flow was ousted during the takeover by Arakyd. However, this is not explicitly stated during the "History" section in the description of these events, even though this is an important feature of these events. I think that this information should either be moved to the "History" section or otherwise at some point prior to the reference to Flo later in the article (eg "former VSIS president Rina Fio said the company..." it be stated that she was ousted by Arakyd.Jinzler (talk) 18:40, February 9, 2018 (UTC)In the "History" section, reference is made to VSIS being "smaller" than Arakyd and was a "younger firm". It may be beneficial to include a sentence in the "Description" section to state that VSIS was a smaller and younger company than its competitor Arakyd. What do you think?Jinzler (talk) 18:40, February 9, 2018 (UTC)
Fred strikes back
There is a redlink category.MasterFred(Whatever) 04:33, March 2, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
Please fix the intro quote formatting. Quotes within quotes become single quotes.Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:50, March 5, 2018 (UTC)- Nothing in that HNN article says anything about the Separatist Crisis. You can't extrapolate that information from the article without some kind of reference note. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:49, March 8, 2018 (UTC)
- Just noting that I added a reference note to the article in an attempt to resolve this issue myself, but I determined the addition to be unsatisfactory and immediately informed the nominator via IRC. This objections remains unaddressed as a result. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:22, March 15, 2018 (UTC)
Comments
Vote to remove nomination (AC only)
- Idle objection past two weeks. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:53, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi (talk) 21:54, March 22, 2018 (UTC)
- Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:56, March 22, 2018 (UTC)