Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Vastil

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Vastil

  • Nominated by: —Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 21:17, April 8, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Third GAN... second in two days.

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Coruscantfan (Talk) 01:32, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Pentastar patrol 501st dogma(talk) 20:02, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:36, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
  4. I did a copy-edit and added the appropriate category, links, and tweaked some prose. Looks pretty solid. Trak Nar Ramble on 04:30, May 14, 2012 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Please note my copy-edit for things to look for in the future. Otherwise, looks good.—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 01:47, May 15, 2012 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Menkooroo 21:46, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
  7. ACvote IRC review. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:40, May 17, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • Intro: Context for Tatooine, Sand People, Geonosians and Manister Base.
    • Done.
  • Intro: Please also try to vary your word choice a bit and not always use Vastil.
    • Done.
  • Bio:Vastil lived on the Outer Rim planet Tatooine during the Cold War between the Galactic Republic and the Sith Empire. He lived in Espelar: Change one of the "lived"s.
    • Done.
  • Bio: You link Major Airen to Airen Cracken which is certainly not true. Please find the correct link or create the page.
  • More to come. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:44, April 9, 2012 (UTC)
Coruscantfan
  • Context for Tatooine in intro.
    • Done.
  • Thanks to Vastil's bravery and the individual's training, Vastil was fully inducted into the militia. Try reworking this sentence so that you don't repeat Vastil but not confuse his training with the "individual".
    • Done.
  • As noted before we don't use double spaces between sentences.
  • That's all for now. :) Coruscantfan (Talk) 03:33, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
501st
  • Context for Geonosians in bio.
    • Done.
  • "Later, the individual would arrive at Largona to check up on Vastil and his men, who informed the individual that they had made it out safely, and they would head back to Espelar as soon as possible." Since you're using "they" to refer to the individual earlier on in the bio, please get rid of at least one they in this sentence, as it could be realating to the indiviual or Vastil and his men, which can be confusing.
  • Good work. Pentastar patrol 501st dogma(talk) 23:47, April 26, 2012 (UTC)
601st
  • Gimme, gimme, gimme some quotes for Bio & p&t!
    • Took me a while. Phooie.
      • Nice. However, per the Manual of style, {{Quote}} should be used for quotations involving two speakers, not {{Dialogue}}. Weird coding involving apostrophes and quotation marks is needed; check out some other articles on the GAN page if it's confusing. Also, zap the punctuation at the end of the bio's quote attribution, baby!
      • Done.
  • "Tusken Raiders" is used in the intro, and "Sand People" in the bio & BTS. Kinda minor, but could the article be consistent?
    • Done.
      • Still two instances of "Sand people." It's OK to use both if the article makes it clear that "Tusken Raider" and "Sand people" are the same thing, but right now they kind of seem like two different things. Menkooroo 19:58, May 16, 2012 (UTC)
  • Can the BTS mention something about why it assumes that the good guy path is taken? Menkooroo 01:37, May 16, 2012 (UTC)

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