Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Vaksai

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Vaksai

• Nominated by: OLIOSTER ^(talk) 06:19, April 15, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: My first foray into a ship GA. Please be gentle. :)

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Pre-nom Kilson^{(Let's have a chat)} 10:50, April 15, 2011 (UTC)
2. 1358 ^(Talk) 21:18, April 20, 2011 (UTC)
3. I love starships! <- Omicron^{(Leave a message at the BEEP!)} 18:34, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
4. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 15:59, April 23, 2011 (UTC)
5. Nice JangFett ^(Talk) 04:34, April 24, 2011 (UTC)
6. Good read. Almost makes me wanna play Galaxies. Trak Nar ^{Ramble on} 04:42, April 24, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Grunny

• I don't particularly like the use of etc. here: "It had over three times the maximum component capacity of the Kihraxz, allowing for heavier, more powerful engines, weapons, capacitors, etc.". Are the other parts defined in the source here? If not, and they use "etc." in the source, do you think it might be better to use something that completes a sentence, like "and other systems" or whatever is appropriate?
  • Better? OLIOSTER ^(talk) 12:21, April 15, 2011 (UTC)
• Should one of these refs point to the other source, or should the first one just be removed? "and used a flight computer as opposed to an astromech droid.[1] Color customization of the ship's hull was also possible.[1]"
  • Just something I overlooked. Removed the first ref. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 12:21, April 15, 2011 (UTC)
• I'll read it in full soon :). Grunny (talk) 11:12, April 15, 2011 (UTC)

Moffship

• Can the "Standard armament" line in the infobox's Armament field be sourced? If not, I'd suggest removing it.
  • Removed. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 18:23, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
• Judging from the article, I presume several empty fields in the infobox can be filled in with "Equipped." I've already done so with the Hyperdrive system field, but it would probably be best if you added the rest.
  • I believe I've done as you asked. I added Equipped to all components that aren't specifically mentioned but can be customized in SWG. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 18:23, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
    • That may be overdoing it. You should remove all those not explicitly stated in the sources. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 00:41, April 23, 2011 (UTC)
      • Done. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 08:13, April 23, 2011 (UTC)
• That's all. Good work. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 18:01, April 22, 2011 (UTC)

Omi

• I think the intro should replace 'center' with 'balance'. A medium fighter, the Vaksai gave its pilot a good center between firing power and maneuverability. <- Omicron^{(Leave a message at the BEEP!)} 18:07, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
  • Done. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 18:23, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
• Maybe change firing power to firepower? Seems more appropriate. <-Omicron^{(Leave a message at the BEEP!)} 18:26, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
  • Done. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 18:27, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
• Looks good! <- Omicron^{(Leave a message at the BEEP!)} 18:34, April 22, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• Thanks to Kilson for a pre-nom review. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 06:19, April 15, 2011 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 05:05, April 24, 2011 (UTC)