Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Uro (Aqualish)

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Uro (Aqualish)

• Nominated by: UberSoldat93 (talk) 15:44, April 11, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 06:34, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
2. Zed42 (talk) 00:06, April 15, 2020 (UTC)
3. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:05, May 14, 2020 (UTC)
4. Tommy-Macaroni 12:51, May 15, 2020 (UTC)
5. 1358 ^(Talk) 21:02, May 15, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Ben

• You should say "Sometime prior to 3 ABY" rather than "Prior to the Battle of Hoth" to give it a proper date rather than a continuity placing as reference to an event. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 06:07, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • We already have a precedent for the latter phrase, Xonr and Vharn. UberSoldat93 (talk) 06:09, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
    • Ah I forgot. That checks out Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 06:21, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
• I think it would be good to mention why the guard is being pulled away in the image in the caption. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 06:21, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • Added. UberSoldat93 (talk) 06:29, April 12, 2020 (UTC)

Zed

• I think you could add that Uro didn't seem to particularly care that those other clans were killed, claiming it was the "price of doing business with the Hidden Hand." Zed42 (talk) 22:45, April 13, 2020 (UTC)
  • Added. UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:54, April 14, 2020 (UTC)

Ecks

• The second and final intro sentence is kind of a run-on. See if you can split it up a bit.
  • How's it looking now? UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:18, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
• Is it clarified in the source what the two are doing on Fikari to begin with? Why did they have to bring guns to start with? Similarly, what kind of clans are we talking about? Clans within the Hidden Hand?
  • Added the stuff about clans doing stuff with the syndicate. The weapons aren't clarified in the comic unfortunately. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:18, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
• "but stated that it also provided a benefit to the syndicate's clients as deals with the Hidden Hand were kept anonymous." What's "it"? The fact that they were working for the Hidden Hand or the fact that Vader is going around killing people?
  • Reworded this a little bit. The dialogue is vague so I have little to work with. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:18, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
• You don't actually introduce Uro as an Aqualish in the biography, so it's a bit confusing when you suddenly start talking about an Aqualish in the second bio paragraph.
  • Done. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:18, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
• Would it be appropriate to pipelink telekinesis when Vader Force pulls(?) Uro? 1358 ^(Talk) 17:39, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
  • Done. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:18, May 13, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:02, May 15, 2020 (UTC)