Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified stormtrooper (suicide)

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Unidentified stormtrooper (suicide)

Nominated by: —Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 02:53, February 23, 2012 (UTC)
Nomination comments:Thanks to CP for his help with the novel and strategy guide. For WP:VG.

It was my pleasure. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:45, February 23, 2012 (UTC)
I want TFU III !!!!!! Plagueis327 05:56, February 23, 2012 (UTC)
Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 08:41, February 24, 2012 (UTC)
Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 11:54, March 7, 2012 (UTC)
JRT2010 01:16, March 22, 2012 (UTC)
Menkooroo 03:12, March 22, 2012 (UTC)
JangFett ^(Talk) 21:02, March 22, 2012 (UTC)

~~The "vision" Starkiller had would be good context for meeting this guy.~~
- Done.
Other than that, good job. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:31, February 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 03:37, February 23, 2012 (UTC)

Point One: I'm deeply shocked that the guy who suggested to create this article is not mentioned! :P
- Oh, yes. Thanks for the suggestion, Lee. :P
~~Point Two: Please mention his species and his gender in the intro.~~
- Done.
~~Context for Vader please.~~
- Done.
~~In the intro, you mention that he was stationed in Timira City while in the bio you say that he simply "was" there. Which is correct?~~
- Done.
Otherwise well done. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 08:48, February 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. I believe I got all your objections. If something's missing, feel free to let me know.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 01:43, February 24, 2012 (UTC)

~~I'm a little confused, in the intro you said the clone escaped from Vader, but then in the bio you say he was trying to escape from Kamino. Do you see the conflicting issue here? :P~~
- He was escaping Vader, who was on Kamino. o_O Fixed. :P
"Starkiller came across the stormtrooper, and, after having a brief vision of Marek using mind trick on another stormtrooper, he used a mind trick on that trooper." So the clone, Starkiller, had a vision of Marek the non clone using a mind trick on a stormtrooper? The "he used a mind trick on that trooper" makes it sound confusing since I keep thinking they're both the same, and possibly the "that" has something to do with it. JangFett ^(Talk) 17:04, February 29, 2012 (UTC)
- See if that helps.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 02:38, March 1, 2012 (UTC)

There's just one thing I would like to point out. Starkiller's (the clone) brief vision was of the future, specifically himself using the "mind trick" technique, not Marek. The vision shows the clone, dressed in the stolen Imperial flight suit, just after he arrived on Cato Neimoidia. Other than that, great job. JRT2010 17:19, February 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Oh, yeah. Nice catch. Taken care of.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 02:38, March 1, 2012 (UTC)

~~Three repetitions of "mind trick" in two sentences - is there an alternative you can use?~~
- Yeah. That was bugging me when I wrote it, but I was having a hard time thinking of a synonym for it. See what you think now.
Okay, so the mind trick is supposed to be worked on this trooper, and the game guide states it should be used at this juncture and we use the guides as a canon guide. I get that. Now ... can you disregard the guide and kill the trooper normally? If so, this should be noted in the BTS, and maybe have some sort of tag indicating that the actions in the article are taken because of game mechanics? - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 22:21, March 2, 2012 (UTC)
- That part only lets you use Mind Trick, and there is no alternative.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 02:04, March 3, 2012 (UTC)

~~Just one question: If we can infer that he's part of the Imperial Military, can we also infer that he's part of the Stormtrooper Corps (a division of the Imperial Military)?~~ Menkooroo 03:00, March 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. Thanks for stopping by.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 03:04, March 22, 2012 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:02, March 22, 2012 (UTC)