Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified mine operator

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Unidentified mine operator

• Nominated by: Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 01:47, April 28, 2015 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Article upgrade

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:42, May 26, 2015 (UTC)
2. Manoof (talk) 23:02, July 19, 2015 (UTC)
3. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 01:59, July 20, 2015 (UTC)
4. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:45, July 20, 2015 (UTC)
5. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:43, July 21, 2015 (UTC)
6. IFYLOFD ^(Talk) 03:29, July 22, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Sykes is a dick to plasma mining camps

• The intro should be expanded a bit, in particular mentioning his gender and saying that it happened on Naboo (saying he encountered Sykes at the time of the Invasion doesn't put him on Naboo)
  • How's that? Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 21:31, May 8, 2015 (UTC)
• How did Skyes contact him?
  • Radio? Changed up. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 21:31, May 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • Now it seems like Sykes talked to the dude face to face, then got in his plane and blew the place up. 501st dogma^(talk) 14:31, May 9, 2015 (UTC)
      • Uh okay? How's that? Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 01:49, May 26, 2015 (UTC)
        • I meant in the body, the intro was fine. :P Just by saying "over a comm" or "via radio" or whatever non-face-to-face chat method was used. 501st dogma^(talk) 02:00, May 26, 2015 (UTC)
          • Adjusted. :) Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 19:25, May 26, 2015 (UTC)
• I don't think the miner cat is appropriate here, because he could just be a business man in charge of the mine who doesn't actually mine. 501st dogma^(talk) 22:49, May 6, 2015 (UTC)
  • Not sure if that is equally speculatory, but removed. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 21:31, May 8, 2015 (UTC)
    • The point is we should speculate his occupation, and we cant confirm that he was a miner.
      • *shouldn`t speculate. 501st dogma^(talk) 01:21, May 19, 2015 (UTC)
• BtS should probably have mention that it is unclear if the operator died when skyes attacked the camp. 501st dogma^(talk) 14:31, May 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • Done. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 21:39, May 9, 2015 (UTC)

Cav

• I would suggest giving more information in the intro regarding Sykes' information request, otherwise it makes it read as if Sykes' is overly bloodthirsty. - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 22:17, May 31, 2015 (UTC)
  • Hopefully that one word of context does it. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 01:57, June 1, 2015 (UTC)
    • I'm not seeing any change in the intro - you changed something in the bio, but not the intro. - Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 21:35, June 22, 2015 (UTC)
      • Good point, added. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 00:13, June 23, 2015 (UTC)

Manoof

• You say in the intro that he is affiliated with the trade federation, but I don't see the TF in the infobox. Manoof (talk) 08:31, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
  • The camp is, not the guy. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 20:40, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
• Could you clarify somewhere that Sykes' bravo flight was part of the naboo fighter corps, or at least was part of the naboo military. Manoof (talk) 08:31, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
  • That's unnecessary context, isn't it? Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 20:40, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
    • I don't think so. Nothing in the intro indicates who Sykes fights for, and the bio goes from an attack by the TF to Sykes, with the only mention being of bravo flight. You mention later he is a naboo pilot, so maybe work that in earlier? Without, someone unfamiliar with bravo flight would have to find out he was with the naboo rather than the TF, by clicking through on bravo flight. Manoof (talk) 01:24, July 19, 2015 (UTC)
      • Okay, added. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 21:17, July 19, 2015 (UTC)
• The last sentence in the bio reads horribly, I'd recommend splitting it into two. One to explain Sykes' reason for destroying the camp (being attacked) and the reason he was attacked (refusing the final warning). Essentially, at the moment there's a logical double redirect. Manoof (talk) 08:31, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
  • Sure, how's that? Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 20:40, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
    • Excellent! Manoof (talk) 01:24, July 19, 2015 (UTC)
• Any clue in the credits for the voice actor, and I believe the year needs sourcing in the BTS Manoof (talk) 08:31, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
  • If you can prove that he is actually Ivar Nitu, Ned Greeby, or Neeka Tiss, yes, we know his VA. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 20:40, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
• If he is part of the Nal Raka Criminal Empire, is he not a criminal by association? Also would that not also make his affiliation to the criminal empire, rather than borvo himself? Just not sure on the consistency with the categories you have. Manoof (talk) 08:31, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
  • Well, yes, but I was trying to avoid adding too much speculation about him being a criminal, not just an operator. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 20:40, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
    • Fair enough Manoof (talk) 01:24, July 19, 2015 (UTC)
• Speaking of categories, you seem to be missing some parameters from the infobox. Manoof (talk) 08:31, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
  • My bad, didn't realise I'd opened up Borvo, it is he who is missing parameters. I did think it was strange nobody had noticed... >.< Manoof (talk) 08:33, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
• Not so much an objection, but any chance of getting the audio? Also I noticed the Nal Raka criminal empire seems to be an orphaned category, that should probably be sorted as well :) Manoof (talk) 08:31, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
  • Thanks for looking it over. Redlink re-created, but I have no idea how to grab the audio. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 20:40, July 17, 2015 (UTC)
    • No worries then! Manoof (talk) 01:24, July 19, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

1. Unaddressed objection past two weeks. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:18, May 25, 2015 (UTC)
2. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 21:46, May 25, 2015 (UTC)

• Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:29, July 22, 2015 (UTC)