- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Unidentified clone trooper lieutenant
- Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:24, June 21, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Thanks to Kilson for his quick archiving. You can review this article today a not tomorrow.
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Support
Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 13:49, July 5, 2011 (UTC)- Kilson(Let's have a chat) 07:36, July 7, 2011 (UTC)
- Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 11:06, July 14, 2011 (UTC) - Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 18:44, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
- 1358 (Talk) 19:54, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:19, July 19, 2011 (UTC)
Object
Ecks Dee
Should the article not be at Unidentified clone trooper lieutenant, a more proper title?1358 (Talk) 11:42, June 22, 2011 (UTC)- Agree, moved. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:52, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
"The trooper considered the loss of life to be a "shame" before leaving." Is this really something for the bio? It is a bit pbp. Suits better for the P&T.1358 (Talk) 20:31, June 30, 2011 (UTC)- Removed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:51, July 1, 2011 (UTC)
Jujiggum
Incorrect dash usage in the opening quote.- I hate dashes - fixed.
I think the bio quote would read better without the "Whatever." It's not really necessary.- Now it's the only word spoken by him not present in the article. Done.
Why no links for the individual Ishi Tib and Human?- Linked and created pages. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:50, July 5, 2011 (UTC)
In the intro you say he spoke with "several persons," which implies that he spoke with approximately three or more people ("several" by definition is "more than two" or, according to some dictionaries, "more than two or three"), but in the body you just name two people.- Replaced with "two".
- Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 03:49, July 4, 2011 (UTC)
- Nice to hear from you. Could maybe take a look at my request on your talk page, but it doesn't hurry. Ah and thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:01, July 4, 2011 (UTC)
- Sure thing. I'll get those quotes to you as soon as I can. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 13:49, July 5, 2011 (UTC)
- Nice to hear from you. Could maybe take a look at my request on your talk page, but it doesn't hurry. Ah and thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 14:01, July 4, 2011 (UTC)
Kilson
In the Intro, "Together with two other persons, the lieutenant speculated on what had caused the explosion." Persons generally refers to Humans, and since one of the two was a alien, you should probably replace "persons" with "beings" or something similar.- Really? Hmm, I did not know that. Replaced with "beings".
- Otherwise, nice job. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 23:56, July 5, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 15:57, July 6, 2011 (UTC)
Toprawa
Please learn and apply the MOS rules on rank capitalization.Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:23, July 15, 2011 (UTC)- I'm not sure if my changes were correct as I had some problems to apply the rules for this unidentified character. Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:00, July 16, 2011 (UTC)
- What you have done so far is perfect. But there are still several instances throughout the article where the rank needs to be capitalized, both in the article text and quote attribution lines. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:06, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
- I hope it is now fine. I'm quite sure that the decapitalization in the only two cases is correct. Thanks. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:18, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
- You're still missing one. Anywhere in the article where it says "the lieutenant" or "the clone trooper lieutenant," etc., "lieutenant" needs to be capitalized. And "Clone" in "Clone Lieutenant" doesn't need to be capitalized in the BTS. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:20, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
- Capitalized the last instance and corrected the error in the BtS. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:13, July 19, 2011 (UTC)
- You're still missing one. Anywhere in the article where it says "the lieutenant" or "the clone trooper lieutenant," etc., "lieutenant" needs to be capitalized. And "Clone" in "Clone Lieutenant" doesn't need to be capitalized in the BTS. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:20, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
- I hope it is now fine. I'm quite sure that the decapitalization in the only two cases is correct. Thanks. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:18, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
- What you have done so far is perfect. But there are still several instances throughout the article where the rank needs to be capitalized, both in the article text and quote attribution lines. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:06, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
- I'm not sure if my changes were correct as I had some problems to apply the rules for this unidentified character. Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:00, July 16, 2011 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:19, July 19, 2011 (UTC)
- I'm away from July 10 till July 15 and unable to adress any objections in this time. Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:15, July 9, 2011 (UTC)