Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified clone trooper (Prosecutor)

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Unidentified clone trooper (Prosecutor)

  • Nominated by: Manoof (talk) 09:57, June 22, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Hopefully not as many mistakes this time :) WPVG

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:14, July 18, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Please double-check your edits in the future. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:56, July 21, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • Preliminaries: Never use brackets to introduce nicknames. Use dashes.
    • Hmm, ok changed.
  • Source the body!
    • Doh!
  • Where do you have this number from. Can't remember seeing that somewhere in the game.
    • It's from the subtitles, and based on the fact that the clones 17 and 35 had the same sort of attribution in the subtitles in their scene in which they are verbally named, that the numbers would also be the same. Most other troopers also don't receive numbers in the subtitles: simply "clone trooper". It can therefore be deduced that is the nickname. Perhaps a bit of a leap but i think it has valid logical reasoning.
      • I double checked by running through the game with god mode on and high speed, the subs aren't consistent (there's another one later with the same attribution) so I've moved the page~, my apologies. Manoof (talk) 04:56, June 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • presumably to try to send a distress signal: As we don't assume, you have to reword this.
    • Reworded, cheers Manoof (talk) 10:31, June 22, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'll take another look once these have been addressed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:06, June 22, 2014 (UTC)
  • Context for Delta Squad in intro and bio. Also "Trandoshans" needs to be capitalized.
    • Done.
      • Missing context in the bio.
        • Not sure what you mean, i have "...the clone commandos of delta squad..."
  • You can't source the fact that this special trooper served during the Clone Wars to the encyclopedia.
    • I think i fixed it...
  • present when calamity befell the Prosecutor and those stationed aboard it during its patrol of trade routes in the Corellian sector. When the ship was attacked and boarded by Trandoshan slavers,: This sounds like the boarding was another event. Please reword.
    • Moved the comma and started the sentence to make it clearer.
  • Introduce Boss's nickname. First because it would otherwise be intro-exclusive and second you can use it to vary your word choice.
    • Mixed it up a bit
  • The quote from Boss (waste of good genes) can be added somewhere. For example, you can merge intro and bio quote and add the new one then.
    • Had to check the quote to make sure the wording was right and i wasn't missing anything. All good now :) Manoof (talk) 04:51, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • The clone is mentioned in the guide? Mention it in the BtS.
    • How's that, does it need any more information? Manoof (talk) 09:02, June 27, 2014 (UTC)
  • I'll take another look after you have done these. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:37, June 22, 2014 (UTC)
  • Capitalize something in the intro. You know what. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:52, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
    • Did you mean uncapitalize? Manoof (talk) 04:43, July 3, 2014 (UTC)
  • A date would be nice in the intro.
    • Added
  • the clone trooper was the first living individual encountered by the squad's leader, RC-1138 : You forget the mynocks. I suggest rewording this a bit.
    • Oh yeah... changed "living individual" to "sentient being"
  • Are you sure that TNEC mentions the mission to the Prosecutor? If not, you would have to use another reference. Have a look here for help (http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Talbot).
    • Ah yes, i have changed the ref
  • made his only known appearance: Not-so-good wording, please change this.
    • Wording is better now that the changing in the editing has been finished ok?
      • Since he will make no more legends appearances, just say that he appeared. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:59, July 20, 2014 (UTC)
        • Excellent, changed. Manoof (talk) 11:33, July 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Plus, you need to source the BtS, especially the part of his voice actor. Clone Commander Lee Talk 11:04, July 19, 2014 (UTC)
    • Hmmm, I thought it was a case of reference everything or nothing. References added Manoof (talk) 14:41, July 19, 2014 (UTC)
Cav
  • Quick one - you only refer to him as "1" once throughout the entire article, in the intro. The name is nowhere in the bio, the PT, or even the Behind the scenes, which should detail how his name was identified. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 18:29, June 22, 2014 (UTC)
    • Issue fixed with moving the page. Manoof (talk) 09:02, June 27, 2014 (UTC)
QGJ
  • Context needed on the Prosecutor in the bio. You also need to establish that he was stationed aboard it, before you say that it was attacked.
    • Fixed
  • The capture of the Prosecutor by the Trandoshans probably deserves an article.
    • Hmmm ok, added a redlink to "Capture of the Prosecutor". If that's a terrible name, I can change it before making an article.
  • he survived until the clone commandos of Delta Squad boarded the ship. Shortly after the squad boarded the ship "Boarded" twice in a row here. Please vary word usage more.
    • Done.
  • I don't think we can say that he was 1.83 Imperial standard meters tall when there's no Empire yet. I know this falls under sofixit, but you should link it as meter instead.
    • Hmmm i dont think has been pointed out for other clones, changed it.
  • Do we know who voiced him?
    • Yes. Yes we do. That should probably be on the article... Manoof (talk) 11:25, July 16, 2014 (UTC)
  • Good job. Love this game. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 09:03, July 16, 2014 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • When you're nominating an article, please always reload the infobox. Use the standard preloads dropdown to add a new version of the infobox, and then move the content from the existing infobox to the new one. That way, you have all of the fields, and you won't end up with deprecated fields like hideb, hidep, hidec. Please do so now.
    • Thought I did that, must've been another article. Done.
      • When the parenthetical is italicized in the title, it should also be italicized in the infobox. I've done so.
  • [[RC-1138/Legends|RC-1138]] — known as "Boss" Please don't put spaces around emdashes. Also, the Boss stuff isn't necessary in the intro.
    • Hmmm ok.
  • This article's too small for a second image, so I've removed it.
    • Ok, how long do articles need to be for a second image? couldn't see anything about article length vs number of images...
      • It's mostly a visual-judgment thing.
  • "He survived the Trandoshan attack by hiding in the torpedo bay, claiming to try to send a distress signal. This showed an unusual cowardice not seen in most clones." This is really just personal opinion—instead, say this: "He survived the Trandoshan attack on the Prosecutor by hiding in the ship's torpedo bays, and though he claimed to be trying to send a distress signal, RC-1138 was of the opinion that the clone trooper hid because he was a coward."
    • Awesome, something about it seemed wrong when I wrote it but i wasn't sure :)
  • There were a few spelling mistakes. If you haven't, I'd switch to Monobook, which allows your browser to show spellcheck errors.
    • I'll do that now.
  • There is now a redlink in the intro. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 17:48, July 22, 2014 (UTC)
  • Punctuation should always go within quotation marks—it should be "Boss." and not "Boss". Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 18:24, August 7, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Objection unanswered for more than 2 weeks. Winterz (talk) 18:59, August 7, 2014 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 18:59, August 7, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:00, August 7, 2014 (UTC)