Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified clone trooper (Geonosis)

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Unidentified clone trooper (Geonosis)

  • Nominated by: Manoof (talk) 04:28, April 7, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:too big for CA after all. WP:VG

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:50, April 9, 2014 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:39, May 7, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote JangFett (Talk) 16:02, May 7, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 23:00, May 16, 2014 (UTC)
  5. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:48, May 24, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • He helped several other clone troopers to defend a barricade from advancing Confederacy of Independent Systems droids, shooting through an opening, and assisted the clone commando RC-1138 and the other troopers to defend the area from attacking droids. He survived the attack and helped in pushing the droids back to a gun emplacement. : Please vary the use of "defend" and "helped" here.
    • Hows that? Thank you thesauruses :P
  • The clone trooper was a male Human clone of the Mandalorian bounty hunter, Jango Fett. He was cloned and trained: "Cloned" is very redundant here. Please replace it, e.g. with born/created.
    • Swapped out created for the last "clone". Not sure if the others can be changed since they are specific nouns.
  • and served as in the Grand Army of the Republic during the Clone Wars: Something is wrong here.
    • Strange, spelling/grammar check didn't even notice a double space...
  • Please mention that the droids are CIS droids in the biography.
    • Done
  • The last two sentences are more form Boss's pPoint of view. Please reword.
    • How's that?
  • Mention his weapon in the p&T. However, then you should put this and the armor in a separate "Equipment" section.
    • Im confused, the Layout Guide says p&T "describes personality traits evident in the source material and how these influence the character's behavior. Examples should be given where possible." Added a bit there and the weapon to equipment section. Manoof (talk) 01:50, April 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:59, April 7, 2014 (UTC)
Jangeth
  • The same birth date issue is present in this article too.
    • Fixed
  • Also like the other article, please source the height to the Encyclopedia.
    • Changed
  • What do you mean by "shooting through an opening" in the intro?
    • Clarified. The opening was between the barricade and the ceiling of the passage.
  • After that, the sentence starts to read awkwardly. Is there any better way to summarize his duties on Geonosis?
    • I think i fixed it, ran it through MS Word and it didn't complain.
  • The redundancy of "Human male" is present in this article too.
    • removed
  • The Kamino sentence in this article is identical to the other Squad 17 clone article. Please fix it.
    • Fixed it. I think lol
  • "As he entered the area, the droids blew through a wall," Who is "he"?
    • Clarified
  • When you say "killing one of the troopers" are you implying 17, 35, or the other clone?
    • The other clone, so I'm not sure how to do this. Originally i had the link to the clone there, but Lee pointed out the link should be earlier with the earlier mention.
  • More to come. JangFett (Talk) 23:17, April 13, 2014 (UTC)
    • I await eagerly. Manoof (talk) 08:52, April 15, 2014 (UTC)
  • Fix his name in the infobox JangFett (Talk) 00:13, May 7, 2014 (UTC)
    • Gah, I knew i forgot something when i moved the pages... Manoof (talk) 02:21, May 7, 2014 (UTC)
Code-8
  • Since the other article is "Unidentified clone trooper 2" then this should be "Unidentified clone trooper 1"
    • Originally it had the 1. As per the Winterz' suggestion on the CA nom for this article [1], the one was dropped.
  • Youmay template needed. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 11:02, May 10, 2014 (UTC)
    • Added, not sure of the wording though. Manoof (talk) 02:08, May 12, 2014 (UTC)
      • Please just add at the end of the youmay "or other clone troopers" pipelinking to Unidentified clone trooper. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 11:10, May 12, 2014 (UTC)
        • Better? I simplified it to just the list of unidentified troopers, as the other trooper is in that list. Manoof (talk) 03:05, May 13, 2014 (UTC)
          • Something's gone wrong, the template isn't showing, and I think the best thing you can do is link to both the unidentified trooper disambigand the other clone trooper. Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 05:56, May 15, 2014 (UTC)
            • Ah dunno, what happened there, i must have accidentally hit something before publishing :/ how's that? Manoof (talk) 09:48, May 16, 2014 (UTC)
El Jefe

Comments

For this and the below trooper, the indirect mention in the guide is "...separated from the clone troopers...", the clone troopers being these two, 17 and 35

  • For Manoof: Please be sure to update this article as you fix Unidentified clone trooper 2 (17's squad). JangFett (Talk) 15:03, April 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:48, May 24, 2014 (UTC)