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Unidentified checkpoint officer

  • Nominated by: Mor9347 (talk) 11:09, 4 July 2024 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: First GAN! Woo!
  • Date Archived: 04:23, 8 August 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 384 words (68 introduction, 299 body, 17 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 313 words (52 introduction, 226 body, 35 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:Video Games WP:Ambition

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

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Support

  1. CometSmudge (talk) 22:36, 4 July 2024 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Lewisr (talk) 01:09, 6 July 2024 (UTC)
  3. Sanathestarr (talk) 15:11, 7 July 2024 (UTC)
  4. ACvote —spookywillowwtalk 02:25, 8 July 2024 (UTC)
  5. Editoronthewiki (talk) 02:40, 8 July 2024 (UTC)
  6. ACvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders AnilSerifoglu (talk) 22:30, 12 July 2024 (UTC)

Object

Comet
  • I think the Encyclopedia ref needs a note similar to the one you have for his species, since this trooper isn't directly mentioned in it
  • Cal pretending to be a prisoner isn't directly stated in the body, so it would be good if you added that
  • I also think you should specify in the intro that the disguised officers are Cal's allies. I was a little confused when I read it the first time.
  • Since his gender isn't known, you can add the category Individuals of unspecified gender CometSmudge (talk) 16:47, 4 July 2024 (UTC)
    • Added/addressed all objections, let me know if more needs to be done. Mor9347 (talk) 17:30, 4 July 2024 (UTC)
Lew
  • The body should use the human reference note you used in the infobox Lewisr (talk) 02:32, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
  • Can you find a way to include the Empire in the body? Lewisr (talk) 02:32, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
  • The stuff in the PT section about the armor should go in an equipment section Lewisr (talk) 02:32, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
    • Added/addressed all objections. Mor9347 (talk) 05:02, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
Ecks
  • Parts, if not most, of the PT section is speculative. I don't think you can draw any conclusions about this officer being skeptical in general based on one line. Similarly, how do you know he took his job seriously? The sentence about hierarchy and urgency is similarly rather speculative in tone.
  • I'm not sure if you really need to duplicate the fact that he didn't believe the rumors in both the biography and the PT. The latter should be enough. Xd1358 (Talk) 19:00, 8 July 2024 (UTC)
    • Removed parts that sounded speculative, kept the not believing the rumors section in the biography rather than the PT as the "skeptical" part was requested to be removed. Also kept the urgency but removed the hierarchy part. Let me know if you'd prefer the parts I kept be removed as well! Mor9347 (talk) 21:58, 8 July 2024 (UTC)
  • To avoid ambiguity, in the second intro sentence, please reword so that it's clear who permitted the officers to continue; right now you use "his" earlier in the sentence to refer to Kestis.
  • I feel like the biography would be more logical if you mention the rumor after discussing Kestis and his plan.
  • I think mentioning why Kestis and his allies were taking him to Sejan would be relevant, i.e. what their endgame was. Xd1358 (Talk) 20:11, 14 July 2024 (UTC)
    • Addressed objections, let me know is there's something you'd do differently.Mor9347 (talk) 09:26, 23 July 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to strike objection (AC only)
  1. ACvote For ecks' objections, has been 16 days and ecks is away on holiday Lewisr (talk) 03:49, 8 August 2024 (UTC)
  2. ACvote —spookywillowwtalk 03:50, 8 August 2024 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:22, 8 August 2024 (UTC)