Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified black-mustachioed Sanyassan

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Unidentified black-mustachioed Sanyassan

• Nominated by: LelalMekha (talk) 01:12, August 3, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Now, he's a handsome chap, isn't he?

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 10:12, September 4, 2012 (UTC)
2. JangFett ^(Talk) 15:25, September 4, 2012 (UTC)
3. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:59, September 6, 2012 (UTC)
4. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:50, September 7, 2012 (UTC)
5. Another GAN bites the dust. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:06, September 8, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Jangeth

• Just like your previous article, please make sure that the article's name reflects everything in the article itself. I would use "Unidentified" for the article's name since it's conjectural. Also, is he a criminal? If he is, this should also be reflected in the article's name too since you bolded it in the intro. JangFett ^(Talk) 19:16, August 14, 2012 (UTC)
  • The page has been moved, and I simply got rid of the term "criminal". It is said in the intro and body of the article that he was a member of the Marauders, who were pirates—so I don't think it's necessary to state he was a criminal once more. --LelalMekha (talk) 13:00, August 18, 2012 (UTC)
    • Avoid linking in the bolded words as well. I took care of that for you. JangFett ^(Talk) 17:10, August 19, 2012 (UTC)
• Reload your infobox
  • Done. --LelalMekha (talk) 08:55, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
• Could you mention that he was a male in both the intro and bio?
  • Done. --LelalMekha (talk) 08:55, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
• Ideally, the first sentence of the biography should introduce the black-mustachioed man instead of describing events surround him. See what you could do to fix this.
  • Tried to change this. --LelalMekha (talk) 08:55, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
• I am not understanding the usage of reference 5. If you're only sourcing it to 3.5 ABY, then I would suggest sourcing "many years later" to a different source. BTM doesn't mention the black-mustachioed man.
  • Your guess was right. Fixed. --LelalMekha (talk) 08:55, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
• Who is this "dark-haired individual". Since you did not introduce the black-mustachioed man in the beginning of the bio, I am clueless on who this guy is due to they both have "dark hair."
  • Well, there are not two dark-haired individuals, it's the same chap. I was just trying to avoid putting "mustachioed" everywhere... --LelalMekha (talk) 08:55, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
• I'll give it another review once these are taken care of. JangFett ^(Talk) 17:10, August 19, 2012 (UTC)

Mario

• First of all, the bolded part of the intro should not be linked to.
  • Has been fixed by Jang. --LelalMekha (talk) 08:55, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
• Context for Endor in the intro.
  • Fixed. --LelalMekha (talk) 08:55, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
• The intro should contain something about the shoot off, and Teek.
  • Added. --LelalMekha (talk) 08:55, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
• I don't think we can assume the guy was unconscious on the groud. Take that part out, and leave it at they fell to the floor and didn't get up.
  • Granted. --LelalMekha (talk) 08:55, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
• Could you add that the prisoners later escaped?
  • Done. --LelalMekha (talk) 08:55, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
• Looks good other wise. 501st dogma^(talk) 12:58, August 19, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 13:02, September 13, 2012 (UTC)

• Once again, thanks to NaruHina. --LelalMekha (talk) 01:12, August 3, 2012 (UTC)
• Are you sure we should say he is tall in the infobox? I always thought only specifically known heights are to be listed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 17:14, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
  • Well, I was never told such a thing, I must confess I frankly don't know. --LelalMekha (talk) 18:02, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
    • Looking at Telan Medon, I see that character's infobox height was listed as "taller than Gar Stazi." Perhaps list something along those lines by finding an individual's height to compare this Sanyassan to, and also mention it somewhere like personality and traits? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 18:09, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
      • I'll see what I can do, but it isn't quite easy. This guy spents most of his screen-time sitting, and when he does get up, you can't really compare with anyone or anything else. You may as well consider saying he was "taller then Teek", but who isn't? I know he was "tall", because Sanyassans are 2 meters tall in average. But if you're more confortable with my removing it, I shall do it. --LelalMekha (talk) 18:14, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
        • Yea though I haven't seen the episode, I'm sure he is evidently tall, but I think only specific known heights are supposed to be in infoboxes. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 18:15, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
          • Well, if that's the only thing you're uncomfortable with, here we go. :) --LelalMekha (talk) 18:19, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
• One more question: any quotes? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 17:53, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nope, that's really all I got. --LelalMekha (talk) 18:02, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
• One more thing: according to IMDB (though that source is known for sometimes not being accurate), Michael Pritchard played "Card Player #1." Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 18:42, September 8, 2012 (UTC)
  • I just checked the movie credits, and that's correct. Added. --LelalMekha (talk) 18:56, September 8, 2012 (UTC)