Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified Twi'lek Sith

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Unidentified Twi'lek Sith

  • Nominated by: NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 07:12, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I was trying to get this up to 1000 words, but I'd like to have this as perfect as possible.

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. JangFett Talk 22:00, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
  2. --Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:59, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
  3. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 02:38, 31 August 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. CC-Lee attacks
    • Source the last sentence in the BtS.
      • It's self-sourcing as it says that was all in Episode IV. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 20:21, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
    • Otherwise nice article, I'm sure other will find that what I have missed. --Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:10, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
  2. The One Sith followed the Rule of One, a system which allows several Dark Lords of the Sith at a time but only one supreme leader, Krayt." I would remove this One Sith information in the P&T, it is unnecessary and redundant. JangFett Talk 16:13, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
  3. Chack Attack:
    • I haven't read past the intro so far, but there's a reason for that. You've got too much unnecessary context in the intro. Furthermore, you stray too far away from this Sith in the intro. I realize that you need to establish the setting, but you have way too unrelated information in the body. This Sith does something in only one sentence of your intro. Quite frankly, there's a lot of fluff. If you're trying to get this up to 1000 words, then please stop. You're not going to be able to get 1000 words without adding a boatload of unnecessary fluff. Chack Jadson 12:16, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
      • I was trying to for my follow-up project. After I abandoned the notion I should have trimmed it down before I put it up here. I've trimmed the extra parts from the intro and fixed things around the body. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 08:30, 18 August 2009 (UTC)
    • Is the "initially peaceful" bit necessary in the intro? It just makes thing a bit complicated, IMO. Chack Jadson (Talk) 14:24, 26 August 2009 (UTC)
      • Not really neccisary. Removed. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 08:13, 27 August 2009 (UTC)
  4. Attack of the Clone
    • "They also killed a large number of Yuuzhan Vong shapers, there to complete the Ossus Project, an experimental Vong terraforming project." Please reword this; it's extremely choppy.
    • "After Sazen was wounded and taken aboard, Kol made a last stand to buy time for them to take off, killing several Sith as well as many stormtroopers, including this one." Please reword; it sounds like the Sith is a stormtrooper. CC7567 (talk) 21:36, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
      • Fixed. Thank you for the reviews. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 02:23, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
  5. A lot of the biography is unnecessary detail. after the New Jedi Temple on the galactic capital planet Coruscant fell and became the Temple of the Sith in 130 ABY and war tentatively ended... -- not relevant. That's one example. To be honest, most of it's not relevant. The BtS is pretty fluffy as well. It's also fanon to say he joined close to the Sith-Imperial War. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:29, September 1, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Remove nomination (AgriCorps vote only)

  1. ACvote Per Ackbar's objection, I really don't believe this article merits GA status. Graestan(Talk) 12:51, September 2, 2009 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Considering he has no dialogue and appears only briefly in a few panels, it's possible that this article is describing more than one Twi'lek Sith. And, as others have pointed out, the article is filled with fluff and fanon. There's no way it merits GA status. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 21:08, September 2, 2009 (UTC)
  3. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 23:00, September 2, 2009 (UTC)