Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified Rodian outcast

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Unidentified Rodian outcast

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 03:32, October 22, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:10, October 25, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Fe Nite (talk) 16:24, November 11, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Winterz (talk) 02:25, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
  5. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:19, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
  6. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 16:46, November 15, 2013 (UTC)

Object

El Jefe
  • Again, no spaces in infobox.
    • Fixed.
  • Outcasts from what?
    • Unknown, they're just referred to as outcasts.
  • "Human" should be capitalized.
    • Whoops, fixed.
  • Article for the skirmish?
    • There is one, and it has been added.
  • You're double-spacing after every sentence. You don't need to do that.
    • Blame School.
  • "however, the clone trooper sergeant, Remy, received the command to execute Order 66; an order that branded the Jedi as traitors to the Galactic Republic." OK, but what would executing the order entail?
    • How does it look now?
  • The other outcasts the Rodian was with should be linked to—this would put you over the redlink limit if they don't already have articles.
  • "The Rodian also wore a uniform that looked remarkably close to the uniform of a Coruscant Security Force member." This is sourced to Order of Outcasts, which I'm guessing doesn't tell you how a CSF uniform looks. Fix the citing here. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:41, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
    • I'm not positive where I would source this too... The first time a CSF member with that kind of Uniform and was identified as a CSF member? I nearly sourced it to Senate Murders simply because Tan Divo wears the outfit, but I figured that either appear sorta lazy or inaccurate, though the latter only in the fact that Tan Divo appeared long after this comic appeared. According to the CSF page Star Wars: Bounty Hunter first called them the CSF, but I never really played that game so I have no idea what they looked like in it. If I'm not mistaken, the Anthony Daniels and Ahmed Best characters impersonate CSF members, or so it's revealed sometime later after AoC premiered... I guess I just don't know where to source the uniform too, or what the best choice would be. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 02:58, October 18, 2013 (UTC)
      • Well, I could maybe source the uniform appearance to Divo's Encyc page... Though the outfit really bears a closer resemblance to Dannl Faytonni's outfit, albeit that 'bib' down the center.
4dot
  • " He was still there by 19 BBY, the final year of the Clone Wars, a galactic event that began on the Outer Rim world of Geonosis during 22 BBY" - Again, context with Geonosis is extraneous.
    • Removed Geonosis mention then. Origin year still seems important for context.
  • The uniform Tan Divo is shown wearing in the link cited looks nothing like the Rodian's uniform. Is this a long bow? Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 22:38, October 21, 2013 (UTC)
    • No, it didn't look like Divo's at all; it was only a place holder. However, it was or less based on the idea I had seen a uniform like that somewhere. CSF uniforms only slightly resemble the one in question, and such I removed the mention entirely. It still looks like a uniform that may of been military or security, but that's about it. Hell, if anything, it looks more closer to the uniform that Napolean Bonaparte wore. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 00:14, October 22, 2013 (UTC)
Jangeth
  • Quick glance: Since it's pretty speculative, I'd avoid saying "Like nearly all Rodians." You can mention he had large eyes, of course, in the P&T. JangFett (Talk) 16:32, November 11, 2013 (UTC)
    • How does that look?--Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 01:19, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
      • You can also say that he's a male Rodian in the "A Rodian" clause. I'll leave this up to you. JangFett (Talk) 13:12, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
        • Do you mean "male Rodian" as in 'Gender before Species'? Or do you mean add the gender in the only appearance of "A Rodian" that doesn't have it listed? (P&T section) --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 15:05, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
          • Add either "A male Rodian," or "A Rodian male," in the P&T. JangFett (Talk) 19:39, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
            • Went with the latter for consistency.
  • Since it reads awkwardly, try to condense the short choppy sentences in the Equipment section. There's a lot of "The Rodian," "He", "The Rodian" sentences. JangFett (Talk) 13:14, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
    • How does it read now? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 15:05, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
      • Better, but I would avoid speculative statements, unless you're certain the source shows it. Look at "The Rodian carried a small silver blaster pistol with him during the fight with Remy's troops and had managed to fire it before he was killed. " What if he used it before the comic? We don't know, so saying "he managed to use it" implies that he hasn't used it before. JangFett (Talk) 19:37, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
        • Reworded it a bit, but I still think the fact that he used it before he died should be mentioned.--Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 23:18, November 12, 2013 (UTC)
          • Yes, you can, but it was incorrectly worded. Does that make any sense? It's fine now. JangFett (Talk) 16:46, November 15, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

  • Wait, am I supposed to do anything now? Or is it in the hands of a higher power? --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 19:23, November 19, 2013 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 16:46, November 15, 2013 (UTC)