Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified Mon Calamari admiral

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Unidentified Mon Calamari admiral

• Nominated by: JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:16, 30 April 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Here's my shortest GAN yet, maybe that means it'll pass sooner.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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Support

1. Nice to see a Moving Target nom OOM 224 ^{༼༽talk༼༽} 17:02, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
2. Liverpool92 22:39, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
3. Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:42, 16 May 2021 (UTC)
4. Did someone say short GAN? 1358 ^(Talk) 19:50, 17 May 2021 (UTC)
5. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:49, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Object

OOM

• The source says some of the Rebellion's "top admirals and generals"—which includes this admiral—have gathered alongside "the Alliance's top leaders," i.e. Rebel High Command. It never states that the admiral was part of High Command, and that means the other admirals and generals aren't necessarily High Command staff either OOM 224 ^{༼༽talk༼༽} 17:40, 30 April 2021 (UTC)
  • How's that? JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 22:26, 30 April 2021 (UTC)
• Looks good. It should be established in the first sentence of the body that the meeting was a Rebel Alliance meeting, or that the admiral was part of the Rebellion.
  • Done.
• For the context for Ackbar, I think it'd be more beneficial to say that he's the commander of the Alliance Fleet instead of simply being a "fellow admiral"
  • Done. Waiting on confirmation from Ayre that the reference is correct, though.
  • We're good. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 19:07, 2 May 2021 (UTC)
    • I've removed the ref since Moving Target provides the same info OOM 224 ^{༼༽talk༼༽} 06:48, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
• The article could use a brief summary of the meeting's result and the victory at Endor. OOM 224 ^{༼༽talk༼༽} 17:58, 2 May 2021 (UTC)
  • Added more on the meeting. I don't think it's necessary to mention Endor, though, since it occurred separately from the meeting. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:34, 2 May 2021 (UTC)
    • Resolved via Discord OOM 224 ^{༼༽talk༼༽} 06:48, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
• The intro should be clearer on what the rebels intend to do with the Sanctuary Pipeline.
• Since the bulk of the intro is about the summit discussing the second Death Star, it should be mentioned that the rebels later destroyed it with the plans conceived at the meeting. OOM 224 ^{༼༽talk༼༽} 06:48, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
  • Added a sentence that should address these two. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 15:26, 3 May 2021 (UTC)

Ayrehead

• The first paragraph of the body can be split and then the biography can be split into two sections. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:52, 14 May 2021 (UTC)
• You need to establish that the admiral is a Mon Calamari female at the start of the biography since you refer back to her as "the Mon Calamari" later on but haven't actually established that in the body. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:52, 14 May 2021 (UTC)
• Once the above is addressed, I actually think the P&T section can be entirely removed, since gender and species are redundant to the biography and asking questions at a meeting isn't really enough to suggest a personality trait. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:52, 14 May 2021 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• Can you tweak the quote's description? It's not immediately clear, at least to me, who the second speaker is. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:40, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
  • Simplified. Thanks. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 12:09, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 12:50, 23 May 2021 (UTC)