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Unidentified Green Company trooper

  • Nominated by: -- 1358 (Talk) 18:27, June 7, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Yeah, unidentified. :P

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:08, June 7, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 16:28, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Beheading has a link. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:30, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 18:08, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Nice work. JangFett (Talk) 18:16, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  6. JMAS Jolly Trooper Hey, it's me! 18:41, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  7. 9_9 --Imperialles 20:12, June 8, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Fett
  • The intro, particularly the first sentence, needs some work. If you recall what I said on IRC, please fix this "This clone trooper served in the Green Company, a unit in the Grand Army of the Republic, during the Clone Wars." The during the Clone Wars could serve in the sentence sentence with "around 22 BBY."
  • "When Separatist Council member Nute Gunray was captured, the clone was stationed on the Star Destroyer Tranquility, which was assigned to escort Gunray to the planet Coruscant." What does one have to do with the other? You can say Gunray was captured on Rodia, and the Tranquility was assigned to escort Gunray back to Coruscant as its own sentence, and then mention this clone trooper and Green Company's involvement. As it stands, we don't know if this clone trooper was actually on the Star Destroyer when Gunray was captured.
    • Done. If it needs anything further, please tell. -- 1358 (Talk) 05:00, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
      • Why was Green Company assigned to the Star Destroyer? To avoid this, you can start a new sentence with that clause "and the trooper and Green Company were assigned to the Star Destroyer" and add onto it.
  • Why did Ventress attack the Star Destroyer?
    • "Either kill or rescue" added. -- 1358 (Talk) 05:00, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  • "Departing from Rodia, the Tranquility, with the trooper onboard," Again, we don't know for sure if he was onboard at this time. You can say Green Company was later present when Ventress attacked the Star Destroyer.
    • Replaced with something else. -- 1358 (Talk) 15:50, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  • It sounds like after the Star Destroyer departed Rodia, they were attacked right away. Please correct this, as it is a factually error.
    • Reworded. Let me know if it needs further tweaking. -- 1358 (Talk) 05:00, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  • "He tried to shoot the Dark Acolyte while reporting her presence, but failed to hit her, which led to his death." Could you somehow reword this sentence. While the clone did try to shoot Ventress, his main motive was to report her presence.
    • Hmm. I'll catch you on IRC regarding this one. -- 1358 (Talk) 05:00, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
      • Resolved on IRC. -- 1358 (Talk) 09:02, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  • Good so far. I'm going to give the article another review after these are fixed. JangFett (Talk) 20:33, June 7, 2010 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the review. :) -- 1358 (Talk) 18:18, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
JMAS
  • Should it be mentioned that he was under the command of Jedi General Luminara Unduli in addition being under the CC-1004's command, as Unduli was Gree's commanding officer? I'm not hard set on this, just I've seen several other clone articles where it's mentioned they were "under the command of CC-(insert number here) and Jedi General So-and-so." - JMAS Jolly Trooper Hey, it's me! 18:31, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
  • Other than that, well done. - JMAS Jolly Trooper Hey, it's me! 18:31, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
    • I think that I'd be pretty redundant to add Unduli to his article; she is not related to the clone in any way. I find just Gree to be sufficient. Thanks for the review! -- 1358 (Talk) 18:35, June 8, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:24, June 15, 2010 (UTC)


  • Thanks to JMAS for the images and quote audio. -- 1358 (Talk) 19:04, June 7, 2010 (UTC)