Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified Galactic Republic regiment (Teth)

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Unidentified Galactic Republic regiment

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  1. ACvote Tommy-Macaroni 10:27, May 10, 2020 (UTC)
  2. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 12:14, May 10, 2020 (UTC)
  3. --Editoronthewiki (talk) 12:20, May 10, 2020 (UTC)
  4. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 16:23, May 16, 2020 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:38, May 21, 2020 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat
  • No info on what armor they use? UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 05:27, April 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Galactic Atlas doesn't directly date the battle of Teth, so the date note will need more explanation. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 18:55, April 22, 2020 (UTC)
  • Note: You must format your templates correctly in future nominations, such as SWArchive in this case.
  • Note: For Databank entries, if a gallery is part of an entry (like the Clone Trooper Armor entry) then you need to list the entry in Sources, not the gallery. It's the same rule for episode guides. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 14:31, April 29, 2020 (UTC)
Tommy
  • Watch your image caption punctuation.
  • Is there a reason a Legends article hasn't been created? If not, I would consider that a redlink that needs to be filled in.
  • Concerning the title of this page, I don't see why this and Unidentified Galactic Republic regiment aren't using the same title with a parenthetical descriptor. Naming policy states: "Articles with identical competing titles should typically be disambiguated via a parenthetical descriptor, and the central title should then become a disambiguation page." So I recommend choosing either "Unidentified Galactic Republic regiment" or "Unidentified regiment" as the disambiguation page (I'd probably lean towards the former), and then moving the other two pages to titles with parenthetical descriptor, probably (Teth) and (Geonosis) or something.
    • That other article was made after this one so I'm not sure why. I need Unidentified Galactic Republic regiment (Geonosis) to be deleted so I can move Unidentified regiment (Geonosis) there. I made a mistake.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:49, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
  • Have you checked other sources for mentions of this subject? I'm sure StarWars.com has something, an image at least, assuming that's canon. Teth also has a decent sources section, have you checked all of those? Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 15:54, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
    • I checked Teth's sources prior to nominating and I didn't find anything. I added a source from StarWars.com that I forgot about and I double checked all relevant articles there.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 00:18, April 27, 2020 (UTC)
  • I'd like to see a snippet explaining what the Republic did based on the regiment's assessment of the monastery. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 15:56, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
    • Added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 00:18, April 27, 2020 (UTC)
      • Honestly that's probably a little too much, considering this regiment isn't mentioned for most of that last paragraph now. I'm talking about a sentence or so just to give context to the Republic's move after the regiment played its part. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 11:06, April 27, 2020 (UTC)
  • "of which at least some" - This does not make sense, "some" is not a quantity that can be considered least.
  • Duplicate link.
  • "The Clone Commander ordered the Clone Lieutenant to contact Jedi General Mace Windu to report on their progress, and the Clone Commander then informed Windu that the monastery was too heavily fortified for them to do anything by themselves, and received the order to stay hidden and to await further orders.[1]" - This is run on, it should definitely be split. Also be wary of repetition of "Windu" and "Clone Commander." Don't be afraid to refer to them as "the Jedi" or "the commander" for variety's sake.
  • "As a regiment in the Grand Army of the Republic, this regiment" - Grand Army of the Republic should be linked here, and I don't like the repetition of regiment. I think this should be the opener to the description, as it being a republic group is probably the most important descriptive information on the subject, hence the title. Something like: "In the Grand Army of the Republic, a regiment of infantry formation was active which bla bla bla. This would also take care of using "this [subject]," which we're trying to move away from in favour of "the [subject]" (please also remove this wording from ref 2).
  • The latter part of ref 2 ("it must also have 2,304 troopers divided into sixteen companies, sixty-four platoons, and 256 squads.") isn't mentioned in the body, you only say "sixteen companies which in turn contained four platoons each. Each platoon contained four squads, for a total of 2,304 troopers". Please cut out unused info from the ref.
  • Context for Jabba.
  • I'd also like some more brief info on the actual kidnapping. By who, to what end?
  • "The Clone Commander ordered the Clone Lieutenant" - I think it's fine to just say "The commander ordered the lieutenant". Keep the same links though.
  • A nitpick, but I'd like to see the term "regiment" used in the second history paragraph, just as a reminder of the subject this article is actually about. Like, "the regiment's ARC troopers" or "the regiment's lieutenant".
  • The images right now are fine, but they're both of the two troopers. Is there a suitable image of their shuttle (even better if they're outside it), which could /maybe/ fit in the description?
  • The fact the troopers were the regiment's best scouts is intro exclusive.
  • "during the Battle of Christophsis in 22 BBY." - I'm assuming this is an error and you mean the Battle of Teth, but I wouldn't consider the regiment's spying on the monastery part of that battle either. Tommy-Macaroni 15:55, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
    • Oops, fixed. My line of thought was that it was concurrent to the Battle of Christophsis--Vitus InfinitusTalk 06:39, May 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • Okay good work, I think I'm nearly done with my objections. Did they contact one or more Jedi? You say they contacted Windu, but then you use "Jedi" as plural (hence "were", "them"). Which is it?
  • The first audio file has Anakin saying "what ab..." at the end. Please cut this out.
  • I'd like to see a little more in the intro, like the fact that they reported to Skywalker.
  • Reviewing note: remember to offset grammatically nonessential parts of a sentence with commas at the start and end. Eg "two members of the regiment, an ARF Clone Commander and an ARF Clone Lieutenant were dispatched to gather more information" needs to be "two members of the regiment, an ARF Clone Commander and an ARF Clone Lieutenant, were dispatched to gather more information." This is because saying who the members of the regiment were is grammatically nonessential; the sentence works fine without it. Therefore, that part needs to be offset by commas. Tommy-Macaroni 10:45, May 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • Okay I decided to go back and watch that part of the episode for myself, and I've added some details I felt were missing. Please read my changes and make sure you're happy with them. I've also subsectioned the history, so please add another quote to the latter section. Audio would be good for that too, for consistency's sake. Tommy-Macaroni 13:45, May 8, 2020 (UTC)
Editor
  • The first sentence in the second paragraph of the history section uses the work order and not ordered--Editoronthewiki (talk) 23:21, April 26, 2020 (UTC)
  • They report that it "looks like" there are at least two battalions, so I do not know if it should be written that there definitively was.--Editoronthewiki (talk) 22:04, May 1, 2020 (UTC)
  • Would this image work better than the image of the shuttle? It shows the troopers on Teth.--Editoronthewiki (talk) 18:07, May 6, 2020 (UTC)
    • That's the image I replaced with the shuttle image. Tommy and I discussed that it would be better to show an image that's not just the two troopers.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 18:51, May 6, 2020 (UTC)

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