Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified Clan Rook warrior

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Unidentified Clan Rook warrior

  • Nominated by: –MJL ‐Talk‐☖ 18:32, January 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This is my first, and likely will be my only, GAN. I look forward to hearing from other users about it.

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)

Support

  1. --Editoronthewiki (talk) 17:01, January 23, 2020 (UTC)
  2. UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:13, February 1, 2020 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat
  • Needs a "Personality and Traits" section. Here, you need to describe the character's features. You can also add the fact that she stood with Bo-Katan against the Empire.
    • I added it, but I'd like more feedback on it.
      • Looks good now.
  • She is very clearly a human here, so add that to the species.
    • Added.
  • I don't think "Clan Rook" needs a category if there's currently only one article that has it.
    • I'm not sure what to say here. Yes, this is the only canon article, but there are three legends articles in that category.
      • Guess we can leave it at that.
  • You're missing an archival link for the episode's BTS gallery, which should also be added to the "Sources" section.
    • Done.
      • I added the archive date for the DB entry too, as well as the archive link in the actual reference to the BTS gallery. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:49, January 20, 2020 (UTC)
  • Shorten the image caption and make sure it doesn't move the heading below.
    • Fixed.
  • IMDB is not a credible source. It's also a wiki since it can be edited by anyone. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:46, January 19, 2020 (UTC)
    • Replaced source. –MJL ‐Talk‐☖ 23:26, January 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • You should add a little more info about when the Great Purge took place and how it fragmented Mandalorians as a whole. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:49, January 20, 2020 (UTC)
    • This was done as well. I tagged the page as containing spoilers, though. –MJL ‐Talk‐☖ 16:07, January 22, 2020 (UTC)
  • Just noticed this while editing, but it would be good to name all the references you used. UberSoldat93 (talk) 16:13, January 22, 2020 (UTC)
    • I personally balk at the thought of naming references which are only used once, but I named them since that seems to be common practice here. –MJL ‐Talk‐☖ 15:52, January 23, 2020 (UTC)
  • Paragraph breaks in multiple sections can be reduced by merging, currently's it's just one sentence, followed by a paragraph, then another sentence, or they're just separate sentences altogether. For the bio, the Great Purge info can remain unchanged since it's not directly related. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:45, January 25, 2020 (UTC)
    • I merged sections as described here. I also added a bit more content to flesh a paragraph out. –MJL ‐Talk‐☖ 03:08, January 26, 2020 (UTC)
  • The Armor article can be linked in the equipment section.
    • Linked.
  • Beskar shouldn't be capitalized. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:45, January 25, 2020 (UTC)
  • Luke Harrington needs a page to remove the redlink. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:53, January 29, 2020 (UTC)
Editoronthewiki
  • I think you should put what the credits call her in the behind the scenes section
    • Done.
  • The credits identified the voice actress, so I think you could just link to the episode as the source instead of IMDB--Editoronthewiki (talk) 19:13, January 19, 2020 (UTC)
    • The article currently uses the episode to source that information. IMDb was only used to verify the fact she was a sound mixer (source updated per above). –MJL ‐Talk‐☖ 23:26, January 19, 2020 (UTC)
Zed
  • It is discouraged to begin introductions with "this," try reword the sentence to avoid doing so.
    • Fixed.
  • I feel like the context for prior and later events is somewhat awkwardly placed at the end of the Biography. The mention of the mission to Mandalore should be placed before any description of events that happened after it.
    • I re-worded that section.
  • "She was also seen" feels too out-of-universe. You can just say that at the time of joining the Mandalore resistance, she was wearing that armor. Zed42 (talk) 19:58, January 19, 2020 (UTC)
    • I cleaned that up. –MJL ‐Talk‐☖ 23:26, January 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Physical traits (species, eye color, skin color) are currently exclusive to the infobox. They need to be detailed in the article body, ideally in the Personality and traits section. Zed42 (talk) 08:31, January 22, 2020 (UTC)
  • You have several instances of references that are repeated unnecessarily—for example, in the middle paragraph of the Biography, there are two consecutive references to Heroes of Mandalore. Zed42 (talk) 08:21, January 24, 2020 (UTC)
Ruiz
  • Is there any reason why the Mandalorian Vambraces entry is mentioned in the sources? I don't see any direct or indirect mention to this individual
    • Removed.
  • The Skywalker Sound link needs an archive link as well.--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 22:22, January 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Could you add some context for the Civil War and the Mission to Mandalore.--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 02:41, January 26, 2020 (UTC)
Tommy
  • Preliminaries:
    • Please expand the intro beyond two sentences. It should be a summary of the rest of the article.
      • Please review this addition.
        • I still think you can detail more history. "In the aftermath of the Mission to Mandalore with Sabine and her father bla bla bla". Just to give some context to her joining the resistance.
    • Please remove duplicate links.
      • Do you mean links found both in the lead and the body or just links found twice within the body?
        • Links repeated in the body. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:20, March 8, 2020 (UTC)
    • Is that main image HD? It looks kinda fuzzy.
    • Are there any suitable quotes for the body, maybe from Bo-Katan? Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 15:45, February 17, 2020 (UTC)
      • I added the Jetpack one for the equipment section. –MJL ‐Talk‐☖ 15:51, February 27, 2020 (UTC)
Anil
  • You should list the StarWars.com episode gallery instead of the Behind-the-Scenes Gallery in the Sources, as the she appears in other galleries too. She is also fatured in the accompanying Rebels Recon video.
    • There is no slide which this characters appears in the episode gallery. There is a slide in the trivia gallery but not the episode gallery. Do you mean the episode guide?
  • Ref 4 should include an actual link to the trivia guide along with a backup link.
    • Added
  • I don't think the last sentence of the Biography is relevant to this article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:31, February 24, 2020 (UTC)
    • I was told to add that sentence per advice found here.
      • I mean, we don't mention Order 66 and fall of the Republic in every single article for the Jedi who lived during the Clone Wars. It's kinda the same situation here. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 00:37, March 2, 2020 (UTC)
  • As far as I can see, the character is actually first seen in this trailer, which should be mentioned in BTS and added to the Sources with the (First pictured) tag. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:53, February 24, 2020 (UTC)
  • I believe you can add Bo-Katan's darksaber-acceptance speech as quote for the Biography section.
  • Context for the Darksaber is needed.
  • Based on the close-up shots of the warrior in the Rebels episode, and the StarWars.com episode guide, I believe it's fair to say that she had a Nite Owl helmet and two WESTAR-35 blaster pistols. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 00:37, March 2, 2020 (UTC)
Vitus

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Objections idle for 10 days. 1358 (Talk) 18:40, March 12, 2020 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:41, March 12, 2020 (UTC)
  3. ACvote MasterCommerce GuildFredcerique 18:42, March 12, 2020 (UTC)