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Trever Flume's mother
- Nominated by: NaruHina Talk
01:12, June 21, 2012 (UTC) - Nomination comments: Why you shouldn't crop off the intro if you end up short of 250 words and have to CAN it.
(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
- 501st dogma(talk) 15:37, July 4, 2012 (UTC)
Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 18:58, July 22, 2012 (UTC)- Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 22:50, July 22, 2012 (UTC) - Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:05, August 7, 2012 (UTC)
- Was going to review this sometime. Finally have done so. Good job. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:32, August 7, 2012 (UTC)
- IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:32, August 9, 2012 (UTC)
Object
501st
One thing. Currently your lead sentence is: "A Human female soldier grew up on the planet of Bellassa and had two children, Trever and Tike Flume, with a doctor." Based on the title, it should probally be something like: "A Human female raised on the planet of Bellassa was the mother of Trever and Tike Flume, whom she had with a doctor, and was a soldier." Because the title is Trever Flume's mother, mother should be the one bolded.- Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 11:46, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
- It doesn't really matter. She was both and either would be a defining feature worthy of giving her an article. It's no different than having an article talk about a random guy on the street and deciding between identifying him as "A man" or "A citizen of..." It doesn't necessarily have to match the article title verbatim if you have options. In this case, I'd say her being Trever's mother is more important for identification—hence the title—and her being a soldier in the Republic Army is her most important contribution to society, her distinguishing feature—hence the bolded lead. NaruHina Talk 11:30, July 4, 2012 (UTC)
- It doesn't really matter. She was both and either would be a defining feature worthy of giving her an article. It's no different than having an article talk about a random guy on the street and deciding between identifying him as "A man" or "A citizen of..." It doesn't necessarily have to match the article title verbatim if you have options. In this case, I'd say her being Trever's mother is more important for identification—hence the title—and her being a soldier in the Republic Army is her most important contribution to society, her distinguishing feature—hence the bolded lead. NaruHina Talk
Exiled Jedi
I think you should mention the Confederacy of Independent Systems by name in the introduction.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 00:58, July 15, 2012 (UTC)
Comments
- I'm going on a week-long enforced vacation. Any objections left will be addressed upon my return. NaruHina Talk 17:46, July 11, 2012 (UTC)
- Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:32, August 9, 2012 (UTC)