Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Torpedo Sphere

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Torpedo Sphere

  • Nominated by: Vitus InfinitusTalk 04:45, March 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Death Star's baby cousin

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 15:43, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
  2. Nice to see these in Canon again. - Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 21:27, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
  3. So I realised my vote is meaningless after I left my original objections, but whatever, good work. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 15:25, April 15, 2018 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Remember to check the linking in date references in future. Ayrehead02 (talk) 06:41, May 15, 2018 (UTC)
  5. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 22:07, June 12, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Clone Just Wants to be Sure
  • Given my unfamiliarity with the Rebel Files, I just want to make sure that Durkteel's status in the Mid Rim can be sourced to the book. --Clonehunter(Report your W.M.D.) 18:24, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
    • Yes, TRF confirms that Durkteel is a mid rim planet--Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:27, March 25, 2018 (UTC)
QGJ
Tommy
Ecks Dee
  • "that had an equatorial trench that ran throughout the equator of the battle station" This is a bit redundant wording. Obviously an equatorial trench goes along the equator per defition.
  • "At the center of the Torpedo Sphere" Given it's a sphere (or spheroid), you're going to have to elaborate a bit what "center" means. My initial thought was you're referring to the inner center of the sphere (coordinates 0,0,0).
    • How is it now?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:58, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
      • An equator acts as a vertical center and in a sphere, the entire equator is a horizontal center, so that's not appropriate terminology. However, I had a shot at rewording it; please have a look and see if it's fine with you. 1358 (Talk) 22:35, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • I don't think the word "basin" is appropriate since there's no water present.
  • Do we know who unearthed the archives? If we do, it'd be appropriate to mention.
    • Added--Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:58, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
      • I don't think you mention the entire chain of people since they're not directly relevant to the subject. Just go with construction crew -> Leia. 1358 (Talk) 22:35, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
  • I've done some rewording to break up a couple of run-on sentences so make sure to see if you're satisfied with them. 1358 (Talk) 21:48, April 19, 2018 (UTC)
  • The first link in reference 3 currently links to Black Ice, a starship, and that doesn't seem right.
  • Just checking: Does the source explicitly identify Durkteel as being in the Mid Rim? If not, it needs a separate reference or you could just remove it altogether. 1358 (Talk) 22:35, April 20, 2018 (UTC)
    • Yes the source explicitly states that Durkteel is a Mid Rim world several times--Vitus InfinitusTalk 06:03, April 21, 2018 (UTC)
  • "Sometime during the years 14 and 19 AFE," Between these years or just in those two years?
  • "Alliance Intelligence of the Rebel Alliance witnessed a spike" OK, this just sounds awkward. Can we reword to get rid of one of the Alliances or something? 1358 (Talk) 18:37, April 25, 2018 (UTC)
  • The second date reference has quite a run-on sentence and I'm not sure what the various "its" are referring to. Please rewrite for clarity. 1358 (Talk) 21:59, May 20, 2018 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • Could you include the authors of Black Ice in the BTS since you include them for Rebel Files. Its probably worth including the illustrators for both as well since they both include depictions of the ship. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:14, April 29, 2018 (UTC)
  • I don't think that the traffic spike allows them to deduce that a constellation Torpedo Spheres are active? The wording says that they will be looking at a constellation if the Empire can pump these out, which suggests to me that the Empire hadn't even managed to produce them yet. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:14, April 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • That's fair, though what led me to that point was that Delto said that the Torpedo Spheres are armed with etc. I reworded to address your objection--Vitus InfinitusTalk 05:08, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
      • The first paragraph of history is now one extremely long sentence. You should split it and also probably re-word this part: "and with intelligence on equipment suppliers, allowed Colonel Haxen Delto". Allowed seems like it shouldn't be there. Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:27, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
        • Reworded--Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:30, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
          • The second sentence doesn't really link to the first now, you need to add "this information, supplemented with..." or something. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:02, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • Are you getting the information about the trenches purely from the image? If so I'm not sure that you can say which part of the sphere is the northern polar region or that those grey lines are even trenches to be honest. Ayrehead02 (talk) 07:18, April 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • Yeah, how should I describe it?--Vitus InfinitusTalk 05:08, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
      • To be honest I'm not sure you need to describe those two lines. I guess if you really feel they need mentioning you could just call them gray lines, although that still sounds odd. Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:27, May 8, 2018 (UTC)
  • Same objection as on Mass Shadow Generator for the dates, you can include 34 ABY for the discovery of the files and as such should change AFE to BBY. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:04, May 10, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • I think the History section needs to make some kind of mention of the Republic's torpedo siege platform from Catalyst. The connection between these two is obvious, if unstated. I would almost argue that the two should be merged if the Catalyst siege platform had been engineered by the Empire rather than the Republic. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:26, May 21, 2018 (UTC)
    • Done. Should I remove the "See also" section? Also, I haven't added the date for the invasion of Naboo because I want to confirm that the date can be sourced to Star Wars: Galactic Atlas first.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:14, May 21, 2018 (UTC)
      • Sorry to interject, but yes 32 BBY can be sourced to that. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 17:16, May 21, 2018 (UTC)
  • As we discussed, the mass-market version of The Rebel Files is now available. Therefore, please upload a high-quality scan from the book for this article's image. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 11:23, July 3, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

  • I will be on vacation and thus unavailable between May 31st to June 18th. I will not be able to address objections during that time as I will have no effective means of doing so. I will be taking care of all raised objections between now to the 31st, thank you for understanding.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:46, May 19, 2018 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Idle objection for the main image. User has had plenty of time to address this, as that objection is now 18 days old, and file is still the low-quality one from Feb 9. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:12, July 21, 2018 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:15, July 21, 2018 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 23:14, July 21, 2018 (UTC)