Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Torktarak

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Torktarak

• Nominated by: Kilson Likes PIE 01:14, 30 May 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Goes along with my Braha'tok nom

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Good job :) Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 20:38, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
2. CC7567 ^(talk) 01:16, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
3. Under the assumption that Tope's objection will be addressed. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 08:51, 5 June 2009 (UTC)
4. Nice job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 15:30, 5 June 2009 (UTC)
5. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 15:32, 5 June 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. The Grand Master
   • Context for Etahn A'baht. (If his rank isn't available, just use his species)
   • Context for Dornean Navy (just a little, since you haven't even introduced the planet yet)
   • "The Torktarak and the Braha'tok met up with the Alliance fleet orbiting Sullust, which was under the command of the Mon Calamari Admiral Ackbar." This sounds as if the planet of Sullust is under the command of Ackbar. I'd suggest reordering the sentence to clarify.
   • "and continued to serve in New Republic's, the reorginized Rebel Alliance after Endor, military forces for several more years." This should be reworded to be more grammatically correct and less awkward; maybe reorder this, or just rewrite the sentence. (I considered using dashes, but it still was awkwardly worded, so I think it should probably just be rewritten)
   • Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 01:17, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Addressed all of them dude, thanks of the review. :) Kilson Likes PIE 19:29, 01 June 09 (UTC)
2. Soresu
   • With the appearances, since the Torktarak doesn't have a confirmed appearance in ROTJ, I'd remove {{1st}} and put it after the Databank entry instead. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 12:05, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
     • For what it's worth, I've just gone ahead and done this. With no confirmation of it being in ROTJ, it would not be appropriate to assert that it did appear in the film at all. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:05, 4 June 2009 (UTC)
3. Toprawa:
   • One minor objection: Can we provide a year for when this WTS entry was created? Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:05, 4 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Addressed, thanks for the review. Kilson Likes PIE 06:33, 05 June 09 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:19, 6 June 2009 (UTC)