- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Tobyl
- Nominated by: Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:57, November 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A little weak minded
(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
- Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 22:00, November 14, 2012 (UTC)
- I made a few minor edits which you'll need to check out, but the rest was good. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 02:17, December 9, 2012 (UTC)
- Exiled Jedi
(Greetings) 15:44, December 17, 2012 (UTC) - Provided Tope's objections are taken care of.—Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 01:27, December 20, 2012 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:39, December 28, 2012 (UTC)- IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 04:06, December 30, 2012 (UTC)
JangFett (Talk) 21:35, December 30, 2012 (UTC)
Object
Exiled Jedi
In the P&T, I would clarify that his two-day growth of beard stubble occured during the operation in 41 BBY. Otherwise, it makes it sound like he always had two-day beard stubble.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 02:28, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. Coruscantfan (Talk) 06:03, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
Toprawa
This reads very much like speculation. Unless the source actually states this, I would suggest removing or somehow rewording: "yet seemed less naive than Jat'ho about the sometimes subversive activities of the Galactic Alliance Guard."- I've changed the wording here, see if its less speculative.
- Perfect. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:39, December 28, 2012 (UTC)
- I've changed the wording here, see if its less speculative.
The article is a bit confusing to me regarding Tobyl's motivation. I think it would help stating briefly which side of the war (GFFA or Confederation) he was loyal to, and also exactly what the purpose of the mission to capture Shevu and Skywalker was.Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 23:00, December 18, 2012 (UTC)- Perhaps this will be an easier way to satisfy my concerns: I think what's really confusing me is the article saying he was part of a "Galactic Alliance Guard operation to capture GAG Captain...etc." That makes it sound like he's part of the GAG and is capturing his own captain. We wouldn't describe a Rebel mission to infiltrate the Death Star, for example, as an "Imperial operation" -- we would describe it as a Rebel operation. Maybe just reword those parts to say "part of an operation to capture Galactic Alliance Guard Captain...etc." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:56, December 22, 2012 (UTC)
- Makes sense, addressed. Coruscantfan (Talk) 02:13, December 28, 2012 (UTC)
- Perhaps this will be an easier way to satisfy my concerns: I think what's really confusing me is the article saying he was part of a "Galactic Alliance Guard operation to capture GAG Captain...etc." That makes it sound like he's part of the GAG and is capturing his own captain. We wouldn't describe a Rebel mission to infiltrate the Death Star, for example, as an "Imperial operation" -- we would describe it as a Rebel operation. Maybe just reword those parts to say "part of an operation to capture Galactic Alliance Guard Captain...etc." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:56, December 22, 2012 (UTC)
Jangeth
Just a quick one, but could you find a way to use the proper {{CSWECite}} template for the CSWE source? JangFett (Talk) 19:43, December 30, 2012 (UTC)- My understanding was that was for the "Notes and references" section not the "Sources" section? Because I didn't do that with Jat'ho. Coruscantfan (Talk) 21:13, December 30, 2012 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:35, December 30, 2012 (UTC)