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Supreme governor
- Nominated by: Dr. Porter
(Talk|Contribs) 09:58, June 29, 2016 (UTC) - Nomination comments: After exceeding the word limit, the article's nomination was moved here. -- Dr. Porter (Talk|Contribs) 09:58, June 29, 2016 (UTC)
(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
Imperators II(Talk) 05:12, July 27, 2016 (UTC)- Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:13, August 7, 2016 (UTC)
Nice job. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:47, August 24, 2016 (UTC)- 1358 (Talk) 09:04, August 27, 2016 (UTC)
- Corellian PremierThe Force will be with you always 23:04, August 29, 2016 (UTC)
- Lewisr (talk) 23:05, August 29, 2016 (UTC)
Object
Ayrehead
Now that you've split the article I'm sure you can find quotes for each of the other sections.Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:06, June 29, 2016 (UTC)Some information currently seems to be exclusive to the intro and needs to be included in the body.Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:06, June 29, 2016 (UTC)The intro could also be longer in my opinion. Could you add a sentence about Leia and Sindian?Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:06, June 29, 2016 (UTC)- I found a quote for the history section, but there doesn't seem to be any left that are suitable for the overview section. Also, I expanded the overview section to include info from the intro, however I don't think there's any way to expand the intro itself without including almost all detail covered below. -- Dr. Porter (Talk|Contribs) 12:29, June 29, 2016 (UTC)
- The intro should be expanded to included at least one more sentence. Just add a line saying that Sindain inherited the title from Mellowyn or something similar. You still also need to start out the body by saying the title was from the planet Birren in the Inner Rim, as this information is still intro exclusive. Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:10, July 3, 2016 (UTC)
- How's that? -- Dr. Porter (Talk|Contribs) 23:32, July 3, 2016 (UTC)
- How's that? -- Dr. Porter
- The intro should be expanded to included at least one more sentence. Just add a line saying that Sindain inherited the title from Mellowyn or something similar. You still also need to start out the body by saying the title was from the planet Birren in the Inner Rim, as this information is still intro exclusive. Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:10, July 3, 2016 (UTC)
- I found a quote for the history section, but there doesn't seem to be any left that are suitable for the overview section. Also, I expanded the overview section to include info from the intro, however I don't think there's any way to expand the intro itself without including almost all detail covered below. -- Dr. Porter
Toprawa
I find "Supreme governor was a lifelong ceremonial hereditary title" to be a little rambling in the number of serial adjectives used. I would suggest dividing that information into another sentence to make it a little easier to digest.In the infobox, I incorporated the use of a redlink for a Canon monarchy article, since a Legends equivalent exists. Please fill in the article.Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:02, August 18, 2016 (UTC)- Done. Sorry it took so long, I've been a bit busy as of late. -- Dr. Porter (Talk|Contribs) 12:37, August 24, 2016 (UTC)
- Done. Sorry it took so long, I've been a bit busy as of late. -- Dr. Porter
- Final reviewing notes: I parsed down the BTS a little bit for succinctness and also reordered it to present the article subject's source first rather than the Legends novel. I realize you intended to present it in a strictly chronological order, but this is more relevant to the reader. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:47, August 24, 2016 (UTC)
- Looks good, thanks. -- Dr. Porter (Talk|Contribs) 21:04, August 24, 2016 (UTC)
- Looks good, thanks. -- Dr. Porter
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:09, August 29, 2016 (UTC)