Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/SunGem

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SunGem

  • Nominated by: IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:34, February 28, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination Comments: Short and sweet.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. I am happy to see TOTJ articles still coming out strongly. Graestan(Talk) 22:06, March 5, 2011 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Nice. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research (Comlink) 16:02, March 6, 2011 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Grunny (talk) 00:29, March 7, 2011 (UTC)
  4. Kilson 02:31, March 9, 2011 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:50, March 9, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Spring training
  • Some of the prose of the intro is too matching to that of the bio. Please diversify. Graestan(Talk) 03:31, March 2, 2011 (UTC)
    • Varied up.
  • I know we relaxed our image rules, but File:Sungem.jpg is really, really bad. I find myself squinting with new glasses even at the non-thumbnail image. Please seek a new upload. Graestan(Talk) 03:31, March 2, 2011 (UTC)
  • Give some context to Battle Meditation in the History. Besides that, nice job, a very interesting read. Kilson 05:39, March 7, 2011 (UTC)
    • I think its fine the way it is. There's already an issue with extraneous info in the history, it wouldn't be prudent to add any more info that doesn't directly pertain to the ship. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:14, March 9, 2011 (UTC)
      • Yeah, I see what you mean. Kilson 02:31, March 9, 2011 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Can we fill in the "Last sighting" field in the infobox?
  • Try to find at least one place to insert a paragraph break in the Description section to break up the wall of text a bit.
  • The speeder link here leads to a disambig page. Can we be more specific with that? Airspeeder or landspeeder, for instance? "just enough to contain a small scouting speeder."
  • This is a dangling modifier. It's literally reading "Arca Jeth was equipped with advanced piloting computers." Please revise: "Equipped with advanced piloting computers, Arca Jeth could fly the ship by himself if the need arose."
  • I don't see how the History section quote applies to this vessel in any specific way. Unless you have a fantastic reason, I would recommend just removing it, as it comes off rather extraneous.
  • I realize that certain context is needed in the History section to tell the story, but I feel that some of that paragraph is likewise just too extraneous to the subject of this article and could be condensed. I would suggest discussing specific changes regarding this objection with me over IRC. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:20, March 7, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:50, March 9, 2011 (UTC)