Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Stax Mullawny

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Stax Mullawny

• Nominated by: 501st Dogma^(Comlink) 20:04, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: A warfare CAN that grew too big....

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 20:09, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
2. Cade Calrayn 14:45, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
3. The Rogues! The Rogues! Menkooroo 00:57, May 14, 2012 (UTC)
4. Nice to see these guys getting identified.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:07, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
5. —Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 22:39, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
6. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:04, May 23, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Hey, I remember this CAN

• Check out the Layout Guide's section on succession boxes: "If there are no known predecessors/successors, the corresponding fields should be left blank." "Unknown" should never be used, as what we fans don't know isn't the same as what In-universe characters don't know.
  • Done.
• Could the intro mention Rogue Group? "Mullawny served as a gunner for the Rebellion's Rogue Eight" sounds kinda weird.
  • Unweirdified.
• The second sentence of the bio is pretty long and run-on, and the middle part is kind of confusing. Explicitly mentioning and linking the Galactic Civil War might help clean it up.
  • Done.
• The article alternates between capital "Rebels" and lowercase "rebels." Consistency, baby! Menkooroo 03:08, May 9, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. Thanks for the review. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:10, May 9, 2012 (UTC)
• Infobox needs to be reloaded.
  • Reloaded.
• "Mullawny was one of the many Rebel pilots from Green and Blue Squadrons, along with members of Rogue Flight..." This kind of reads as if he's definitely part of Green or Blue Squadron (I did reword it a bit due to this objection, but it still reads a bit oddly). Can you reword it? It's probably not strictly necessary to mention all three squadrons again; you've already established that he's from one of them, so you could just refer to it as the starfighter complement this time around. Might be the easiest solution; your call. Menkooroo 03:24, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Did it the "easy" way. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:32, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
• One more: If a pilot's fighter appears in something, it should be added to their "Appearances" section with a (Fighter only) tag. Since the only way to be sure we see this guy's snowspeeder would be if all twelve snowspeeders appear in the same shot, can you watch the Hoth scenes in The Empire Strikes Back and see if such a shot exists? I'll check through some of the comic adaptations for you. If you do find a shot with all twelve snowspeeders, Empire would be his (First appearance), and Warfare would be {{1stID}}. Menkooroo 20:39, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
  • OK --- nothing in the Marvel comic adaptation or the photocomic. However, Star Wars Manga: The Empire Strikes Back 1 includes a shot of all twelve snowspeeders, so it should count as a (Fighter only) appearance for every member of Rogue Flight who doesn't have a line or a face (Luke, Dak, Wedge, Wes, Zev Senesca, Hobbie). No mention of Rogue Eight in the radio drama. What did you find in the film? Menkooroo 23:00, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
    • Haven't looked at it yet. I plan to do it tonight tough, in the next hour hopefuly. Doing homework currently, actualy, taking a break from it currently. :( 501st dogma^(talk) 23:06, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
      • Update: It doesn't look like this video from Lego Star Wars includes all twelve snowspeeders, either. However, the Battle of Hoth appears in several other video games. Can you see what you can find on youtube? Menkooroo 23:08, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
        • Was heading there anyway so yes. Off to do homework briefly. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:11, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
          • Confirmed. 12 T-47s in empire. Off to check game clips of hoth. 501st dogma^(talk) 23:45, May 10, 2012 (UTC)
          • No 12 in Rogue squad 1, 2, 3, or Renagade, none of the Battlefronts, or force commander as its a strategy commander game (you could probally spawn 30 T-47s). Star Wars: Galactic Battlegrounds and Star Wars: Empire at war are also strategy games, so the 12 will not be in those either. I'll add to the appearances tommorow. 501st dogma^(talk) 00:09, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
            • Great. Thanks for checking. I did some youtube browsing too and came up with the same negative results (also for Shadows of the Empire). Galaxies has a bunch of snowspeeders, but it looks like they haven't been boarded by their pilots yet. Novelization and Infinities are also negative. So, in summation, just the film itself and the Manga? Menkooroo 00:39, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
              • Yes, just those two. I'll have to go chane my Pommoner nom too. Thanks for checking. 501st dogma^(talk) 11:21, May 11, 2012 (UTC)
                • Added to appearances and to BtS. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:29, May 11, 2012 (UTC)

Return of the Jedi

• Question: When you refer to him as "scarred," do you mean that he actually had a scar, or that he was scarred emotionally? Either way, could you please make this more clear. That's it from me. Good job.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 22:11, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
  • Let me quote the book: "The scarred, sardonic Mullawny was....". That's all the info it gives, so I'm not sure which one it is. Should I leave it the way it is? Thanks for the review, 501st dogma^(talk) 22:35, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
    • I suppose so since we don't know which it's intended to be.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 22:39, May 21, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:04, May 23, 2012 (UTC)

1. For better reading flow, I'd split the bio paragraph into two at "In 3 ABY". The stuff above is more about the person himself, and the stuff below that are actual events. Just my opinion. Other than that, it's good! Cade Calrayn 14:45, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
   • Thanks and done. 501st dogma^(talk) 21:02, May 1, 2012 (UTC)