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Special tactical unit

(4 ACs/4 Users/8 Total)

Support

  1. Fe Nite (talk) 18:08, March 13, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Looks good Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:17, March 21, 2013 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Assuming all objections are satisfied. Winterz (talk) 17:58, March 24, 2013 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote And another article I don't have to nominate for Project Hero. Good work. Cade GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit Calrayn 19:06, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 20:02, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
  6. —Jedi Kasra ("Indeed.") 04:37, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
  7. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 11:42, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
  8. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:44, March 26, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Exiled Jedi
  • "However, the initial assault ended in disaster for the unit as it sustained ten casualties with six dead and five wounded." Your numbers don't add up here, please fix it. In the intro you mention that seven were killed and four were wounded, which I assume included Jorin's death as well.
    • Done.
  • "However, the Knight began to speak to Nidaljo, inspiring him and urging him not to give up." You just said they had been having a converstaion, so I suggest you reword this part.
    • Done.
  • "The team discovered that Planet Prison weapons were gone and that Doctor Tarnis had in fact been a Sith Lord and was in league with Black Sun." I thought they were looking for the plans, not completed weapons.
    • Done.
      • Actually, C-fan, they've already recovered the plans. This raid was strictly to rescue Tarnis. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 19:39, March 4, 2013 (UTC)
  • Could you try to combine some of the short sentences in the second paragraph of the game mechanics section.
    • Done.
  • "When the Jedi arrived to help, they were able to rally Nidaljo and his men to break through Black Sun's forces." Were there more than one Jedi? From the history section, I thought there was only one.
    • They is used because officially we don't know if it is a he or she.
  • It seems to me that you could have a quick description section about the unit talking about the unit's purpose, equipment, and organization.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 17:08, March 4, 2013 (UTC)
  • The quote in the description section makes it sound like the special tactical unit in the game is not a unique group. If that is the case, you should probably change the article to reflect this.
    • It is the only group mentioned.
      • Yes, but the quote says "a special tactical unit" not "the special tactical unit." To me, this indicates that there were more than one of these units.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 22:41, March 17, 2013 (UTC)
  • The quote uses lower case to describe the unit. If that is how it is consistently spelled ingame, I would suggest moving the article to "Special tactical unit and changing the names in the article.
    • That's the only time the name is fully spelled out, but as above, its the only unit ever mentioned.
      • Since its refered to as "special tactical unit" in its only mention, then the article should use that name.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 22:41, March 17, 2013 (UTC)
  • I believe the first paragraph of the game mechanics section always happens no matter what the player decides to do, so it doesn't need to be inside the tags.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 21:46, March 10, 2013 (UTC)
Fe Nite
  • Put 'CSF' in parentheses after you say 'Coruscant Security Force.' Like you did with MMORPG. Example: of the Coruscant Security Force (CSF) that operated during the. Don't forget to do it in the History section either.
    • Done.
  • Under the notable members section you don't even say Coruscant Security Force. You only have CSF. Fe Nite (talk) 17:22, March 4, 2013 (UTC)
    • I don't believe its necessary to repeat Coruscant Security Force if I've already associated it with the CSF abbreviation twice prior to that. Coruscantfan (Talk) 19:36, March 4, 2013 (UTC)
      • Yeah, you are probably right. Fe Nite (talk) 20:09, March 4, 2013 (UTC)
Winterz
  • You should probably avoid the usage of "cops" :p. Winterz (talk) 12:14, March 13, 2013 (UTC)
    • Well I use it to vary the wording and it is a canon term for police. I could use seccer but that term was only in one novel and is not as easily recognized by readers. Coruscantfan (Talk) 02:45, March 14, 2013 (UTC)
      • It may be canon (to some extent meh) but it's still slang. We should be respectful when writing an article, so no-no to slang terms and ye-ye to police officer ;). Winterz (talk) 08:42, March 14, 2013 (UTC)
        • Though I disagree because the slang term has been used in several other GA and FA approved articles, I've gone ahead and changed it so that cop no longer appears. :) Coruscantfan (Talk) 07:04, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
          • Well I strongly oppose that. Calling a police officer "cop" is like calling the Jedi Order a "Hokey religion". Winterz (talk) 21:53, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
Cav
  • Can you mention the date of the sacking of Coruscant in the opening of the History section? Also, there appears to be an errant comma after "Sith Empire", unless you're missing something from the sentence.
    • Done. The comma was intentional.
  • Little nitpicky, but you describe Black Sun as "newly formed" in the intro, but not in the main article. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 10:18, March 20, 2013 (UTC)
Cadeth
  • The intro is kind of confusing. You talk about the unit, then start talking about CSF and Black Sun, and then you mention the units again. I think at the very least, you should move the part about the unit's composition earlier in the intro, and maybe think about cutting down on the context for Black Sun - maybe you can work it into the sentence about Nidaljo.
    • Done.
  • In the spirit of the above objection, you should probably mention in the intro that the units were meant as bridges between the military and the CSF.
    • Done.
  • A little more context on the sacking - I think you should mention the GGW.
    • Done.
  • You link to Black Sun Territory early on, but there's no context for it when you actually call it by that name.
    • Fixed.
  • Personally, I don't entirely see the need for a notable members section, but that's your decision.:
    • I'd prefer it.
  • You should link to video game instead of the Wikipedia MMORPG article; at least that's what I've been told - we go with a site link before an external one.
    • Done.
  • Good work. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 21:13, March 21, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:44, March 26, 2013 (UTC)


  • I'll come back after EJ's done with his review, but I found a tidbit of info in the conversation files that might be of use to you. Nidaljo describes the current state of his team as "half-strength", which gives you an estimate of the size of special tactical units. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 22:45, March 17, 2013 (UTC)