Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Skirmish in the Kalikori Village fields

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Skirmish in the Kalikori Village fields

• Nominated by: Cade Calrayn 03:45, June 29, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: This reminded me of the Jekk'Jekk Tarr level in KOTOR II. My knowledge of canon made me play a female Exile, just like I named my male Revan Revan. So simple.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. JangFett ^(Talk) 05:05, July 10, 2012 (UTC)
2. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 10:03, August 1, 2012 (UTC)
3. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 15:19, August 1, 2012 (UTC)
4. —Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 19:05, August 8, 2012 (UTC)
5. 1358 ^(Talk) 19:25, August 9, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Sir Jangston

• Your intro is too small compared to the rest of the article. Please beef it up some.
  • Wow, that was a tiny intro. Fixed.
    • "Around 3,641 BBY, having returned from a successful raid on a Flesh Raider shield generator in the Tythos Ridge mountains, the Padawan returned to the Twi'lek settlement of Kalikori Village" The double "returns" here does not help his sentence much. Since you're referring to the Padawan, you could possibly change one of the returns. JangFett ^(Talk) 18:21, July 1, 2012 (UTC)
      • Fixed.
• Starting in the beginning of the Raid, could you vary the term up "Padawan" to make it less repetitive? JangFett ^(Talk) 14:45, July 1, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 16:34, July 1, 2012 (UTC)
• "Around 3,641 BBY, near the end of the Cold War between the [[Galactwrecently discovered" Yeah, check that link :P JangFett ^(Talk) 18:21, July 1, 2012 (UTC)
  • Weird. Fixed. Cade Calrayn 16:52, July 5, 2012 (UTC)

Exiled Jedi

• Perhaps you should create an article for toxin mine?--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 03:48, July 21, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 18:06, July 27, 2012 (UTC)

Cav

• Redlink in intro. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 19:31, July 22, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 18:06, July 27, 2012 (UTC)

Ecks Dee

• If the Jedi really was alone, is there any point in using a commander field in the infobox?
  • Blarg.
• Same objection as in your other article: It is unclear whether the title is conjectural. Please apply a {{Conjectural}} or explicitly mention the bolded title in the intro.
  • Blarg!
• "Upon returning, the apprentice found that the village's Matriarch Sumari had passed away, leaving her daughter Ranna Tao'ven to lead in her place." To be honest, this doesn't really come off as relevant to the intro. Thoughts?
  • BLARG
• Your other GAN has the navigation box below the references, whereas this one has it above them. We don't seem to have any policy on this, but I'd recommend putting the navigation box below like in the other GAN. 1358 ^(Talk) 09:42, August 9, 2012 (UTC)
  • BLARG!! Cade Calrayn 14:31, August 9, 2012 (UTC)
    • Those BLARGs mean done, if you didn't know. Cade Calrayn 14:31, August 9, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:25, August 9, 2012 (UTC)