Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sith warbird

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Sith warbird

• Nominated by: Jinzler (talk) 10:46, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: For the barn-burner

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:53, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
2. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 00:25, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
3. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 08:25, January 16, 2014 (UTC)
4. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 03:58, January 18, 2014 (UTC)
5. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 13:17, January 21, 2014 (UTC)
6. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 04:21, February 7, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Ayrehead

• Could you add the Non-sentient species category. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:36, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Done --Jinzler (talk) 20:34, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
• Could we have a little more context for the Dark Jedi exiles in the body? Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:36, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • I've now added a little extra here. I deliberately phrased the article to describe them as "Dark Jedi Exiles", rather than "the Dark Jedi Exiles", because I hoped that this would of itself give context to the group, because they were essential exiled Dark Jedi and the term adequately describes what they were. Please let me know if you still think that the context given here is insufficient. --Jinzler (talk) 20:34, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
• I'm not sure if the details about the equipment and such should be in the warbirds in the galaxy section, it feels more like it might fit in history. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:36, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • I would kind of prefer to keep that information where it currently is, if at all possible. The information on the equipment doesn't really comfortably fit into either section, so I decided to put it in the galaxy section because I have tried to use that section to describe the ways in which the creatures were used from a tactical perspective during their service to the Sith. As I said above in the familiar nomination, I have to hold my hands up to lacking experience on nominating species articles, so please let me know if you think that I have been misguided in this regard. Thanks for reviewing the article! --Jinzler (talk) 20:34, January 5, 2014 (UTC)

A force user

• Unsourced thing in the infobox. Cool article. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 18:40, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
  • Fixed, thanks very much! --Jinzler (talk) 23:17, January 10, 2014 (UTC)

Toprawa

• I find this sentence to be rough, since the subject intending to be modified (the warbird) is so distant from the opening modifying clause. I'd like to see if you can't reword this to bring the two closer together. It might help to try rewriting the sentence in active voice, rather than passive, which tends to breed wordiness and other bad grammatical constructs: "Originating in the frozen mountains of the world Kar Delba in the Stygian Caldera, at some point during the early history of the Sith—a Force-sensitive species from the planet Korriban—Sith warbirds were discovered and subsequently domesticated by the Sith Empire." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:17, January 13, 2014 (UTC)
  • Revised, let me know what you think of it now. Thanks for reviewing the article. --Jinzler (talk) 22:10, January 15, 2014 (UTC)
    • Good. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 08:25, January 16, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

• No further quotes are available other than the two given in the article. --Jinzler (talk) 10:46, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
• Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:21, February 7, 2014 (UTC)