Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sith familiar

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Sith familiar

  • Nominated by: Jinzler (talk) 10:46, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: For the barn-burner

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:05, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Wasn't familiar with the topic till now. ~SavageBOB sig 17:13, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:49, January 14, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 04:05, January 18, 2014 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:14, January 21, 2014 (UTC)
  6. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 02:38, February 22, 2014 (UTC)
  7. --Lelal Mekha Old Republic military symbol (Audience Room) 10:20, February 22, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Ayrehead
  • .The first sentence of Bio and appearance reads like an individuals article not a species. Ayrehead02 (talk)
    • That was to some extent my intention when writing the article, as I hoped for that sentence to serve as a general introduction to creature that was to be described. I admit that I do not have a great deal of experience at writing species articles so I would appreciate any advice that you can give regarding what you were looking for here, as I'm not quite sure what it is that you want me to do. Thanks! --Jinzler (talk) 20:13, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • To be honest the sentence would probably changed the first word from the to a. At the moment the sentence sounds like it's describing a character not a whole species. Otherwise you could keep the and change it to the sith familiars were etc. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:57, January 6, 2014 (UTC)
      • I see what you're getting at and I have now adjusted the article, I will certainly bear this in mind when working on species articles in the future. Thanks again. --Jinzler (talk) 23:20, January 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Needs to be in the non-sentient category. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:10, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done, thanks for your very prompt review. --Jinzler (talk) 20:13, January 5, 2014 (UTC)
Savaged…
  • In the intro, you say they could be created by Sith alchemy. Were there other methods, then? If they are all alchemical creations, I think you could just say, "Familiars were created by the Sith … by Sith alchemy."
  • I'd like to see a "Behiavior" section. What about making the second paragraph of "Biology and appearance" into "Behavior"? It seems to fit to me. ~SavageBOB sig 15:13, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
    • Nice idea, I've now done that. Cheers. --Jinzler (talk) 15:18, January 11, 2014 (UTC)
El Jefe
  • "that resembled a small scavenger bird." This phrase is in the first sentence of both the intro and the body. Kinda nitpicky, but it sticks out.
  • Feel like we could do with less context on the Sith in the History. You've already introduced them. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 03:59, February 7, 2014 (UTC)
    • I've trimmed it back a bit now. Thanks reviewing the article. --Jinzler (talk) 21:12, February 19, 2014 (UTC)
Mekhagodzilla'd
  • If you think it's possible, could you find some way to mention the fact that another Force tradition, the Nightsisters, also had their familiars? --LelalMekha (talk) 20:09, February 10, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:31, February 22, 2014 (UTC)


  • Just to confirm, no quotes are available that are suitable for this article. --Jinzler (talk) 10:46, January 5, 2014 (UTC)