Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sith armada

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Sith armada

• Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 02:50, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: First fleet GAN; more Fate of the Jedi: Omen & LE. Note: Special thanks to Tranner and Tope for help figuring out the article's layout.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Lamest Sith armada ever to win the article name "Sith armada," however a great article. Graestan^(Talk) 02:52, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
2. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 13:46, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
3. CC7567 ^(talk) 16:17, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
4. Jinzler 14:51, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
5. —Master Jonathan^{(Jedi Council Chambers)} 20:18, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
6. --Darth tom (Imperial Intelligence) 12:36, 10 July 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. "With the Omen repaired, the Tribe began to capture vessels relatively intact, rather than just forage them for parts, and the fleet quickly grew." The "relatively intact" breaks up the flow a bit, as it's not entirely clear what it applies to; can you try rewording the sentence? CC7567 ^(talk) 04:20, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
   • Tweaked. Thanks for the review, CC. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 11:21, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
2. Three of the paragraphs in the "History" section start with "In" and then a date, ie "In 41 ABY". This is a bit repetitive, so could you perhaps consider rephrasing at least one of these instances. Otherwise, a very good read. --Jinzler 16:30, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
   • Changed the second one. Thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 19:33, 8 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 07:12, 16 July 2009 (UTC)