Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sharn

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Sharn

• Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 21:41, May 20, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Was considering an Alphabet Squadron nom but Shadow Fall might ruin it, so have another Battlefront: Twilight Company one.

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Support

1. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:05, May 21, 2020 (UTC)
2. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 08:39, June 21, 2020 (UTC)
3. Tommy-Macaroni 18:19, July 1, 2020 (UTC)
4. Zed42 (talk) 18:29, July 1, 2020 (UTC)
5. 1358 ^(Talk) 18:47, July 1, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Fred strikes back

• Redlink category. MasterFredcerique 07:03, May 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 08:52, May 21, 2020 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• "Sharn was a female first officer who was one of the highest ranking members of the Rebel Alliance's Sixty-First Mobile Infantry, serving as second-in-command of the Braha'tok-class gunship Apailana's Promise, which served as escort to the Sixty-First's CR90 corvette Thunderstrike." This is too much of a run-on, cutting this in half would be good.
• Operation Ringbreaker will need more context. Why were they attacking these targets? UberSoldat93 (talk) 17:51, May 21, 2020 (UTC)
• The image of the Promise can be added to the article. It ain't the highest quality image, but it's the only shot we have of the ship right now. UberSoldat93 (talk) 17:52, May 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • All addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 18:43, May 21, 2020 (UTC)

Spooky

• Intro: "In 3 ABY, Sharn attended a meeting where the Imperial defector Everi Chalis presented an intentional plan for the Sixty-First." I think 'intentional plan' could be given slightly more context. Not as much as the Biography of course, but at least that it was an attack plan would add some needed clarification.
• Bio: "The Besalisk Gadren asked Chalis to leave and asked if Namir agreed with her plan." Perhaps swap out one of the 'asked'? Was going to copy-edit it, but didn't know which one would be better to swap. 'ask' is used in some form four times that paragraph, seems a bit repetitive.—spookywilloww^talk 05:23, June 1, 2020 (UTC)
  • Both addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 07:53, June 1, 2020 (UTC)
• Just noticing, the second paragraph seems extremely play-by-play to the section of the book, by listing out the dialogues and actions and all. Could it perhaps be fiddled with/reworded to perhaps focus more on the actions of the characters, less so the character lines?—spookywilloww^talk 00:12, June 3, 2020 (UTC)
  • How does it look? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 21:40, June 4, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:47, July 1, 2020 (UTC)