Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Seventh Alsakan Conflict

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Seventh Alsakan Conflict

• Nominated by: Cade Calrayn 03:46, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: First GAN as project leader for WookieeProject Warfare... can't let 501st do all the work!

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. Good work on Warfare! 501st dogma^(talk) 23:53, May 4, 2012 (UTC)
2. Jinzler 11:29, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
3. —Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 20:32, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
4. JangFett ^(Talk) 21:02, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
5. Fixed misspelling of "millennia" (for shame), 'sgood now Enochf 05:17, May 30, 2012 (UTC)
6. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:15, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
7. CC7567 ^(talk) 08:25, June 17, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Jangston

• Please reload your infobox. More to come. JangFett ^(Talk) 14:33, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 17:06, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
    • Check your formatting. Also, you currently have three redlinks in the infobox. Per rule 8, you cannot have any redlinks in the infoboxes. Please see what you could do to kill them. JangFett ^(Talk) 21:04, May 1, 2012 (UTC)
      • Redirects are blue! Cade Calrayn 03:39, May 4, 2012 (UTC)
        • Formatting still remains. JangFett ^(Talk) 23:56, May 4, 2012 (UTC)
          • Done, I think. Cade Calrayn 00:11, May 5, 2012 (UTC)
• Fact tag in the infobox JangFett ^(Talk) 20:55, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
  • Gotcha. Cade Calrayn 21:01, May 28, 2012 (UTC)
    • kthx JangFett ^(Talk) 21:02, May 28, 2012 (UTC)

501st

• The redlinks for articles in the info box need to be created.
  • Blue!
• Intro: context for Pius Dea, so we know what the "religous cult" is.
  • Done.
• Behind the scenes is needed.
  • Done.
    • In BtS: you can remove the part about the battle of Uquine as the article is about the seventh conflict; also, context for Tinker, Tailor.
      • Done. Cade Calrayn 23:17, May 4, 2012 (UTC)
• First paragraph in aftermath, source the whole thing, not just the first two sentences.
  • Took me a while to find a good source.
• Not really a complaint, but in the "conflict" section, some of those paragraphs are quite short. Consider puting some together.
  • Done.
• Good Work. 501st dogma^(talk) 21:00, May 1, 2012 (UTC)

Jinzler

• The conflict is mentioned in the new issue of Star Wars Insider, which seems to indicate that it was also known as the "Pius Dea Civil War." This information needs to be included in the article. --Jinzler 17:37, May 5, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done.
• In the introduction, you might want to give some context as to who Contispex was, eg "the Pius Dea leader Contispex XIX," or something along those lines.
  • Done.
• "Unknowningly influenced by the Jedi, many believers joined the movement and renounce the traditional Pius Dea faith in favor of one more favorable to alien species." This section is unclear as to whether the "believers" were joining the Renunciates or the Pius Dea proper, so please clarify this.
  • Done.
• "The schism sparked a brutal civil war between the Renunciates and the Faithful." Please clarify here that the "Faithful" were those that stayed loyal to the Pius Dea cause.
  • Done.
• You might also want to consider giving some context on what an "OR/D" is, or just linking to "Ordnance/Regional Depot" directly, rather than to the acronym, because some readers might not know what an "OR/D" is.
  • Done.
• "Every single member of the faith was removed from office, and Jedi Grand Master Biel Ductavis assumed the office of Supreme Chancellor." The word "office" is repeated twice here, in close succession. You might want to consider revising this, to give the wording a little more variety.
  • Done.
• Do you think that it is worth adding the quote from Tinker, Tailor in which the war is mentioned, eg the one giving in the Battle of Uquine article? It seems to be the only quote that in any way relates to the article.
  • Might as well.
• Those two redlinks in the navigation template need to be killed, because GAN rule 8 states that there should not be any redlinks in templates.
  • Done.
    • Now that you have added the "Pius Dea Crusades" navigation box to the bottom of the article, the redlinks in that are now going to need to be eliminated as well. --Jinzler 18:12, May 6, 2012 (UTC)
      • I am currently awaiting the outcome of a Trash Compactor on many of the Crusades, so this objection is in the process of being resolved.
        • As the TC is likely ending with the articles' deletion, I have removed the redlinks and TC'd articles from the navboxes. There shouldn't be any more redlinks in the navigation boxes. Cade Calrayn 01:52, May 18, 2012 (UTC)
• I found this article quite interesting to read, and I look forward to seeing more Warfare nominations from you in the future. --Jinzler 21:39, May 5, 2012 (UTC)
  • Why, thank you. Cade Calrayn 14:39, May 6, 2012 (UTC)

Exiled Jedi

• There are two redlinks in the Pius Dea Crusades box at the bottom of the article. There is also a redlink in the Insider template in the source section, which is not allowed.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 01:58, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
  • Made the two template redlinks, but I'm leaving the source one alone. It's actually not against the rules to have a redlink source, I think—and I have no idea how I would fill that redlink anyway. Cade Calrayn 03:47, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
    • It's a special case since it uses a template per rule 8: "...and no redlinks in the introduction, infobox, or any templates." I have the magazine so I created the article for you.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:14, May 31, 2012 (UTC)

Attack of the Clone

• Is "Alsakan" or "Alsakani" the plural form of the species? It's used rather inconsistently throughout the article, so please check all your usages of this.
  • Alsakan is the planet, and Alsakani are what the human natives of the planet call themselves
• Any relevant images that can be added to the article?
  • Unfortunately, no.
    • What about one of Coruscant? Or of the Galactic Republic somehow? Unless any potential images would be too much of a stretch, there should ideally be at least one image in the article. CC7567 ^(talk) 22:42, June 11, 2012 (UTC)
      • We don't have any images of Alsakan or Uquine, so I went with Coruscant.
        • Regarding the image caption that you just added: please note and adhere to WP:DASH. CC7567 ^(talk) 20:23, June 16, 2012 (UTC)
          • I didn't violate anything in WP:DASH that I can see, but I changed it to an endash anyway. Cade Calrayn 00:14, June 17, 2012 (UTC)
            • An en dash was needed, per the clause about "compound words." "Pius Dea" is two words, so any compound word linked to it needs an en dash. It's the "Post–Galactic Emprie Era" example listed on the WP:DASH page. CC7567 ^(talk) 03:50, June 17, 2012 (UTC)
• Please make sure that you're using citation templates ({{InsiderCite}} and {{Hyperspace}}, in this case), as well as formatting references properly.
  • I don't know how I would do that, since I never had access to Hyperspace and don't know how to find the backup. Where would I find the url, and how do I fill out that template?
    • The backup is not necessary, and the url is listed on the article's page on this site. All instructions are clearly listed on the respective template pages. CC7567 ^(talk) 22:42, June 11, 2012 (UTC)
      • Done. Cade Calrayn 15:01, June 13, 2012 (UTC)
        • The "int" field needs to be filled out to link to the article on Wookieepedia. Also, both the HoloNet News citation and the same Hyperspace citation from the article body are lacking the correct template usage. CC7567 ^(talk) 20:23, June 16, 2012 (UTC)
          • Done.
            • It needed to be filled in the citation as well, but I went ahead and did it to save time. Please be careful in the future, though. CC7567 ^(talk) 03:50, June 17, 2012 (UTC)
• Which source does the "Renunciation" name come from? That should be clearly pointed out with {{1stID}} in the Sources list like the other names are.
  • Done.
• There were several small errors, particularly pluralization and underlinking, that nevertheless should not remain in the article after proofreading. Please try to take more time to proofread in the future. CC7567 ^(talk) 23:00, June 10, 2012 (UTC)
  • Okay. Cade Calrayn 16:06, June 11, 2012 (UTC)
• One last one: would it be worth mentioning in the Aftermath that the "Alsakan Conflicts" continued in spite of the Jedi's victory over the Pius Dea? Might be relevant, seeing as it wasn't the last Alsakan Conflict. CC7567 ^(talk) 03:50, June 17, 2012 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 04:25, June 17, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 08:25, June 17, 2012 (UTC)