Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sea Leviathan

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Sea Leviathan

• Nominated by:—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 12:27, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: About time I finished this thing, my first-ever species nom.

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. Mauser^Comlink 18:42, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
2. Great job. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 02:07, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
3. Looks great after I copyedited a couple of errors that I should have caught the first time. :P Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 04:45, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
4. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 20:38, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
5. CC7567 ^(talk) 04:08, 12 June 2009 (UTC)
6. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 16:32, 12 June 2009 (UTC)
7. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 08:06, 15 June 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. Mauser:
   • "Sea Leviathan was only able to draw upon the energies of Mon Calamari species; its blister pods had no effect on any other" - where exactly in the comic is this mentioned? I fail to find it anywhere, even after double-check.
     • Addressed.
   • You often use Mon Cal instead of a full Mon Calamari. Is that use of the nickname really appropriate?
     • Addressed.
   • Otherwise looks awesome. Mauser^Comlink 16:28, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks, Mauser. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 17:25, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
2. "...scientist of Galactic Emperor and Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Krayt’s One Sith Order." is a little unwieldly: it took me two reads to get the exact meaning. I'd suggest dropping Krayt's titles or making some other change to make the sentence simpler.It might also be prudent to say who created the original, land-based Leviathan in the BtS. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 17:43, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
   • Addressed the first part. However, I don't think talking about the original Leviathan's creators is necessary, since I already said it twice: once in the intro, and once in the body.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 18:17, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
     • I mean their OOU creators. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 10:32, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
       • How's that?—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 12:06, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
         • Looks good. -- AdmirableAckbar ^(Talk) 22:27, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
3. Just one minor thing: At the end of the History section it could be made a little more clear why the Leviathan was unable to attack the Devilsquid. You say that it was programmed to attack the Mon Calamari, but you never really say that it can't attack the Devilsquid. Other than that, great job. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Jujiggum) 01:57, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
   • Addressed via IRC. Thanks for the read, GM. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 02:05, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
4. From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
   • Last two sentences under "Abilities" are unsourced.
     • Addressed. Thanks for the review, GMT.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 18:33, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
   • Otherwise, good work, Tommy. Grand Moff Tranner ^(Comlink) 15:12, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
5. Soresu
   • with the expressed purpose of eradicating the native Mon Calamari species in accordance with Emperor Krayt’s ordered extermination of a tenth of their entire race. Define:Eradicate on google. "the complete destruction of every trace of something". The word eradicate is a little misleading.
     • Addressed.
   • Darth Krayt's ordered extermination of the Mon Calamari species, Again, it seems like a complete genocide of the race. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 02:03, 13 June 2009 (UTC)
     • I did change it, but I have to point out, however, that moments before Krayt killed Gial Gahan, he said, "The Mon Calamari will have time to suffer and reflect on their crimes until all are extinct."Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 20:08, 14 June 2009 (UTC)
   • I must say, one of the most interesting articles I've read in a good while. You've done a great job with it. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 02:03, 13 June 2009 (UTC)
     • Thank you, ThreeTwo. Please advise if anything further is required.Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 12:18, 14 June 2009 (UTC)
       • Nup, nothing elsethat I can find. Until we meet again, NineTwoEightOne. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 08:06, 15 June 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• No sources.
• Easy pickins.
• Short and sweet, courtesy of WP:LE.—Tommy9281 ^{(No quarter given, all exits sealed)} 12:27, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:28, 18 June 2009 (UTC)