Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Saphrro

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Saphrro

• Nominated by: Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 03:08, March 18, 2013 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Project Meteor

(5 ACs/0 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Assuming Floyd's objections are met. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 21:48, March 20, 2013 (UTC)
2. Cade Calrayn 22:10, March 20, 2013 (UTC)
3. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 02:44, March 23, 2013 (UTC)
4. CC7567 ^(talk) 16:47, March 23, 2013 (UTC)
5. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 17:29, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd

• "during the group's attempt to overthrow the Republic-backed government of the planet Ord Mantell during the Separatist War." You don't need both the "during the"s here. Fold them together.
  • Fixed.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:30, March 19, 2013 (UTC)
• "as the commander of one of the cells Avilatan, a island on Ord Mantell." Missing word here, I assume?
  • Corrected.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:30, March 19, 2013 (UTC)
• In the intro, you describe the Cold War as being "fought", but in the bio you describe it as merely a "period of unrest". Which is it?
  • Its more of a period of unrest, changed.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:30, March 19, 2013 (UTC)
• "an island on Ord Mantell." Is saying Avilatan is on Ord Mantell really necessary? We already know the war takes place there.
  • Removed.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:30, March 19, 2013 (UTC)
• The way you're capitalizing "sergeant" is inconsistent.
  • I believe I changed them all to upper case now.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:30, March 19, 2013 (UTC)
• IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 04:57, March 19, 2013 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 13:30, March 19, 2013 (UTC)

Attack of the Clone

• For the infobox's "death" field, is the specification of Mannett Point necessary? I realize that specificity is helpful, but to my knowledge we usually don't list locations more specific than the planet, only if the planet isn't known. Please clarify. CC7567 ^(talk) 16:32, March 23, 2013 (UTC)
  • I just put it there to have more context. I can remove it if it would be better without it.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 16:43, March 23, 2013 (UTC)
    • If that's fine with you, yeah, I would suggest removing it, since it doesn't seem to be extremely necessary. CC7567 ^(talk) 16:44, March 23, 2013 (UTC)
      • Removed.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 16:46, March 23, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:29, March 23, 2013 (UTC)