Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Sadow

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Sadow

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~~The page on Teta lists her gender as "Female," but this article refers to the individual as "itself." Which article is correct in this matter?~~ UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:30, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
- Fixed, I thought of the planet when it's the individual--Vitus Infinitus^Talk 16:54, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
~~If you've stated that Sadow was male, shouldn't this be established in the first sentence of the intro?~~ UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:32, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
- Done--Vitus Infinitus^Talk 16:54, September 21, 2020 (UTC)

~~Ref 1 doesn't need to mention lord being the male equivalent of lady, and I'm not sure about the capitalisation used here. Simply saying lord is a title for males would do.~~
- Removed per Lewis' objection--Vitus Infinitus^Talk 18:20, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
Info from the last two sentences of the "Great Hyperspace War" section should be combined. The second sentence is itself unnecessary, seeing as it's already said in the previous. However, I'd have "left barren and scarred" replace "annihilated" since the latter term suggests Ossus got blown up.
- Fixed--Vitus Infinitus^Talk 18:20, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
"he maneuvered through the Sith Citadel and recognized a number of statues of Sith Lords from his studies that were etched into the walls." Should be made clear who the pronouns refer to. This goes for the "he" in the next paragraph as well. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 17:19, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
- With the removal of Sadow's gender, it should be good now--Vitus Infinitus^Talk 18:20, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
  - Still, "he" could be confused for Sidious. - - - OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 20:22, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
    - Hmm, I suppose. Fixed it--Vitus Infinitus^Talk 20:37, September 21, 2020 (UTC)

~~Darth Noctyss is referred to as a Sith Lord, despite the fact Noctyss is female. Therefore, I don't think we should be assuming Sadow's gender~~ --Lewisr (talk) 17:09, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
- Ah, yeah that's not appropriate then.--Vitus Infinitus^Talk 18:17, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
  - Males category is still there --Lewisr (talk) 18:23, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
    - oop, got it--Vitus Infinitus^Talk 18:24, September 21, 2020 (UTC)

~~I personally don't think the subsectioning of the Biography is necessary when one of those sections is a paragraph long.~~
- Removed--Vitus Infinitus^Talk 19:33, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
"The Qel-Droma Epics also claimed that the planet Ossus was a Jedi retreat that was left barren and scarred when Naga Sadow triggered stars in the Cron Cluster nearby, becoming the Cron Supernova." Sadow's actions should be the main focus of this sentence, with the devastation of Ossus as a subsequent result. Zed42 (talk) 19:13, September 21, 2020 (UTC)
- Reworded--Vitus Infinitus^Talk 19:33, September 21, 2020 (UTC)

~~In the intro, can you please state where the rock walls on Exegol are?~~ MasterFred(talk) 07:37, 19 December 2020 (UTC)
- Done --Vitus Infinitus^Talk 03:07, 21 December 2020 (UTC)

Right now, the intro is way too long. I cut down on some of the redundancy in detail in the Bio and condensed it into two paragraphs, so the intro doesn't need to also be two paragraphs. Currently, the intro is pretty much giving the exact same level of detail as the Bio. You should find a way to summarize the two Bio paragraphs into one intro paragraph. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:59, 22 December 2020 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:39, 28 December 2020 (UTC)