Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Roon

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Roon

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Support

  1. ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 15:46, 1 November 2022 (UTC)

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Thrawn
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  • I'd like to see the mention of the Roonians moved out of Description, since that section is typically restricted to info about non-anthropogenic (or non-sentiento-genic?) features of planets.
    • Moved.
  • Since on the maps Roon is only represented as an abstract dot and a label, please document in the BTS the Smuggler's Guide as the planet's first proper visual depiction.
    • Added.
  • I'm OK with Roon being in the Pyke Syndicate locations category, since that type of categories work kinda like "the places where this criminal organization had a presence", but I do not think that same line of reasoning really extends to the Affiliations field of the infobox, especially when it's parallel to galactic governments such as the Republic and the Empire.
    • Removed.
  • Please expand upon Kenobi and Mekedrix's dialogue about Roon in Obi-Wan 4, it's quite relevant here.
    • How does this look?
  • Hmmm, it's not quite clear from the text which of the three planets - Seylott, Ryloth, and Tatooine - is identified as such by Smuggler's Guide and which by Odyssey.
    • Should I dupe the Odyssey reference, since that is the one that covers two instances?
      • Well, which source establishes which?
        • Smuggler's Guide covers Seylott, Odyssey covers Tatooine and Ryloth. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 17:11, 20 November 2022 (UTC)
          • Does Smuggler's Guide describe Seylott somewhere besides the map, then, because I'm not seeing where the map identifies it as a planet? Imperators II(Talk) 17:24, 20 November 2022 (UTC)
  • Er, what's going on with the capitalization of "pirate Queen"? Is that really a thing in the source?
    • Source mentions "pirate queen" on it's own so I capitalised Queen since that's the formal title. What would you suggest about that?
  • I'm not seeing a justification for specifying the species for Leo when you don't do the same for the other characters mentioned in the article.
    • Very well, removed.
  • "After stealing the Smuggler's Guide and discovering the location of Kanata's caches" — what caches are those?
    • That should make it clearer.
  • "Tryphon Leo planned to acquire some of the cache's wealth" — is this really meant to refer to a cache, singular, in which case - which one?Or is it a typo for caches, plural?
    • Yeah, typo. Fixed.
  • "The plans were taken aboard the Alliance corvette Tantive IV, commanded by Captain Raymus Antilles and the Alderaanian Princess Leia Organa, fled to a number of Outer Rim locations" — grammar issues here.
    • My bad, fixed.
  • I'd like for you to specify in the intro that the Roonians were humans.
    • Done.
  • Looking at the revelant comic issue, I'd say it's pretty fair to say that Mekedrix specifically led the Death Wind, not just joined it. Imperators II(Talk) 19:12, 17 November 2022 (UTC)

Comments

  • Word count has reached 1008 so I will be taking this to the FAN once these last couple objections are resolved. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 17:14, 20 November 2022 (UTC)