Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Rilo Tang

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Rilo Tang

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Support

  1. Andykatib 20:49, October 17, 2016 (UTC)

Object

Imperators II
  • Check your quotes for missing punctuation, and make sure to use "[...]" if you omit anything from the original quote.
  • "Moff" is capitalized inconsistently.
  • Tang's species should be mentioned in the article's body.
  • Make sure that all characters are referred to (after their introduction) by their last names, not their first names.
  • You shouldn't present the parts about Tang being sent by his parents to the academies as fact, since it's just a guess by Rath Velus.
  • It should be indicated clearly that not only Tang's survival but his work in trash compactors was only rumored, not proven fact.
  • The last sentence of the Bio section isn't really relevant to Tang.
  • I believe that the previous Rath Velus' paragraph in the novel would be a better choice for the "Personality and traits" section quote - it's more specific, and actually describes Tang instead of the Imperial academies.
  • Also, I'd refrain from using "boy" to refer to Tang in your text and instead use "young man" or something to that effect. Seeing how Tang had become an Imperial gunnery officer, after all, it seems unlikely to me Rath Velus used the primary meaning of "boy" as "male child" to refer to Tang. Imperators II(Talk) 22:52, November 20, 2016 (UTC)
  • Oh, and please vary the way you refer to Tang throughout the article. You simply use "he" or "him" too many times in a row, and sometimes it can even lead to some confusion as to who exactly are you talking about. Remember that you can use "he/him" or "Tang", "the young human", the "young officer", "the gunnery officer" or any other variation thereof you can think of. Imperators II(Talk) 22:58, November 20, 2016 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

  1. ACvote Outstanding objections after two weeks. Imperators II(Talk) 08:12, December 5, 2016 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:42, January 7, 2017 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 22:55, January 7, 2017 (UTC)