- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Ria Deleru
- Nominated by: Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 08:38, April 2, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I'm assuming this is what was going through her mind.
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
- Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:38, April 3, 2012 (UTC)
Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 23:47, April 4, 2012 (UTC)- Coruscantfan (Talk) 02:34, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
Menkooroo 04:11, May 9, 2012 (UTC)- —Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 00:17, May 12, 2012 (UTC)
Object
Lee's charge
Could you make it a little bit more clearer that Coruscant is the capital world of the Republic. Actually it sounds (to me) that she lived on Coruscant and immigrated to the capital world (which is another planet).- Done.
Maybe some small context for Galactic City, the Old Galactic Market and the Guild?- Indicated it was on Coruscant, that it was a region, and that it was a crime syndicate. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 19:21, April 2, 2012 (UTC)
Could you make it clearer that she was from Glee Anselm in the bio?- It's not in the location that it is in most articles (the first sentence), but it's pretty clear as it stands right now. If she and her husband immigrated to Coruscant from their species homeworld of Glee Anselm, it's pretty clear that they are coming from Glee Anselm, correct?
- Indeed. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:38, April 3, 2012 (UTC)
- It's not in the location that it is in most articles (the first sentence), but it's pretty clear as it stands right now. If she and her husband immigrated to Coruscant from their species homeworld of Glee Anselm, it's pretty clear that they are coming from Glee Anselm, correct?
Context for the Market in the bio.- Done/
- I'm aware that most of this objections are nitpicky, but please see what you can do. Very good work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:03, April 2, 2012 (UTC)
- Taken care of them all, with the exception of your third objection, because I think the wording is sufficiently clear and has much better flow as it currently stands. Thanks for the review, and let me know if you have any other concerns. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 19:21, April 2, 2012 (UTC)
Jujiggum
I'm not totally familiar with the ins and outs of TOR, but why no article for the Republic war hero?- Because it's the Republic player character - it could be the Knight, Consular, trooper, or smuggler, and it would be an out-of-universe link in an in-universe article. —Cade Calrayn 18:35, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Yup, Cade's right. It can be completed by either the Jedi Consular, Jedi Knight, trooper, or smuggler, so we can't link to an individual article. I could, however, add links to each of those character articles in the BTS if you want. What do ya think? Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 19:29, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Ah, gotcha. Yeah, it might be worth a BTS note just to say that it could be any of those characters. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:28, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Done. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 23:39, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Ah, gotcha. Yeah, it might be worth a BTS note just to say that it could be any of those characters. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:28, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Yup, Cade's right. It can be completed by either the Jedi Consular, Jedi Knight, trooper, or smuggler, so we can't link to an individual article. I could, however, add links to each of those character articles in the BTS if you want. What do ya think? Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 19:29, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Because it's the Republic player character - it could be the Knight, Consular, trooper, or smuggler, and it would be an out-of-universe link in an in-universe article. —Cade Calrayn
- The linking was a little messy, and please remember that "this" is a not a past-tense term. Otherwise, good work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 18:33, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- While I don't have a problem with the alterations that you made, it should be noted that as a demonstrative, I do not believe that "this" has a tense, either past or present. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 19:24, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Er, tense isn't really a matter of opinion… The deal is, "this" technically shouldn't be used in the regular past tense, because "this" fundamentally refers to something that is demonstrable here and now in the present. That's why we changed all of our "unidentified" articles to start with "A person" instead of "This person." Tommy's the one who pointed it out to me ages ago; I'd suggest checking with him if you're not on board or if you want more specifics on the grammar rules regarding "this." I'll vote as soon as the BTS note is up. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:28, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Oh, I wasn't saying "I believe" as an expression of opinion—all I meant was "if I recall correctly." Essentially, what I'm saying is that there is no tense difference or grammatical error between saying "This was a disaster" or "That was a disaster." Both are past-tense third person; the only difference is in the manner in which the modified component is demonstrated or modified. As I said, I understand that it's a stylistic choice that Wookieepeida abides by, so I don't have a problem with complying. I just wanted to point out that, as a demontrative, "this" doesn't technically have a tense of its own. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 23:39, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Gotcha, sorry for misunderstanding. Anyway, I was definitely told that it was technically wrong; I'll look into it more. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 23:47, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- As will I. Thanks for the review Jon :) Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 23:54, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Oh, I wasn't saying "I believe" as an expression of opinion—all I meant was "if I recall correctly." Essentially, what I'm saying is that there is no tense difference or grammatical error between saying "This was a disaster" or "That was a disaster." Both are past-tense third person; the only difference is in the manner in which the modified component is demonstrated or modified. As I said, I understand that it's a stylistic choice that Wookieepeida abides by, so I don't have a problem with complying. I just wanted to point out that, as a demontrative, "this" doesn't technically have a tense of its own. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 23:39, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Er, tense isn't really a matter of opinion… The deal is, "this" technically shouldn't be used in the regular past tense, because "this" fundamentally refers to something that is demonstrable here and now in the present. That's why we changed all of our "unidentified" articles to start with "A person" instead of "This person." Tommy's the one who pointed it out to me ages ago; I'd suggest checking with him if you're not on board or if you want more specifics on the grammar rules regarding "this." I'll vote as soon as the BTS note is up. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 21:28, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
- While I don't have a problem with the alterations that you made, it should be noted that as a demonstrative, I do not believe that "this" has a tense, either past or present. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 19:24, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
Image
Is it possible to get another image of her? Since she's from a video game, there's gotta be some more screenshot potential, and images of the article's subject are always preferable to semi-relevant images of other people.Menkooroo 02:38, April 13, 2012 (UTC)- It would be, but the only image I could get would almost identical to the one already in the infobox. It might be at a different angle, but otherwise it'd be the same. This is because this character only appears during a conversation cutscene. It's one-on-one the entire time; she does nothing but stand there and talk. When the conversation is over, she leaves and is not visible as an NPC. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 06:33, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay!
- No worries! :)
- Sorry for the delay!
- It would be, but the only image I could get would almost identical to the one already in the infobox. It might be at a different angle, but otherwise it'd be the same. This is because this character only appears during a conversation cutscene. It's one-on-one the entire time; she does nothing but stand there and talk. When the conversation is over, she leaves and is not visible as an NPC. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 06:33, April 13, 2012 (UTC)
I'd sofixit if it weren't in a quote: Should "shipped of Coruscant" be "shipped off Coruscant?" If not, can we get a [sic]? That's all;great job. Menkooroo 02:57, May 9, 2012 (UTC)- Typo! Fixed. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 04:02, May 9, 2012 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:17, May 12, 2012 (UTC)