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Redhurne system
- Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 21:16, 15 February 2022 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A follow on from Redhurne star.
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- Almost signed this as an EC lol Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 09:13, 1 March 2022 (UTC)
Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:10, 14 April 2022 (UTC)- UberSoldat93
(talk) 04:42, 27 April 2022 (UTC) 
1358 (Talk) 14:08, 28 April 2022 (UTC)- — Samonic 14:36, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
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Mining Operations - Can you rephrase the empire taking the republic's place to something more definitive eg "After the Republic was reformed into the First Galactic Empire" or something similar. Phrase it right and you might be able to use the following reference for the year. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:52, 28 February 2022 (UTC)- Does that look alright?
Can we say the system was affliated with the republic as well based on this? There'd be a corresponding category as well. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:52, 28 February 2022 (UTC)- The novel says "in the waning days of the Republic," so there's nothing to say the Republic was actually directly involved in it.
Mining Operations - I think the result of the supernova burning/cracking planets and the transmutation of materials from the radiation could go in the description, and reduce this part to just saying approximately when the supernova occurred. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:52, 28 February 2022 (UTC)- How does that look?
Rebel raid - first sentence isn't quite right, not sure what it's trying to say regarding the hyperdrive? were they aiming to replace the hyperdrive? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:52, 28 February 2022 (UTC)- Missed a word there. Fixed.
Rebel raid - Did Chalis do it as her former position as an Imperial governor, simply an Imperial, or as a random voice warning of danger? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:52, 28 February 2022 (UTC)- Does this help?
BTS mentions Admiral Tyrus Meori, any reason this isn't noted in the body? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:52, 28 February 2022 (UTC)- He's just a recipient of a comment mentioning Redhurne. Hardly relevant to the article besides that one inconsistency.
Can you please check ref number 6 ☺ Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:52, 28 February 2022 (UTC)- Fixed. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 02:45, 1 March 2022 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
As it stands, the second introduction paragraph doesn't explain why the information is relevant to the Redhurne system.1358 (Talk) 14:18, 23 April 2022 (UTC)- Amended. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 15:02, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
I feel like the Description and the beginning of History really duplicate a bunch of information. See if you could cut down on it a bit.1358 (Talk) 16:45, 27 April 2022 (UTC)- How does this look? Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 13:03, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 14:41, 28 April 2022 (UTC)