- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Rebu
- Nominated by: Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 15:40, August 15, 2011 (UTC) - Nomination comments:Coming up to GAnom for databank info. WP:VG
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
CC7567 (talk) 03:09, September 6, 2011 (UTC)- --Talrrivanian
(Headquarters) 06:19, September 16, 2011 (UTC) - Just returning the favor. MasterFred
(Whatever) 19:37, September 22, 2011 (UTC) - Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 15:18, September 27, 2011 (UTC)
- Menkooroo 05:22, September 28, 2011 (UTC)
Object
Talrrivanian
Only one thing, if there is enough info, I would make is infobox bigger.--Talrrivanian (Headquarters) 10:59, August 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Sorry, that's all the info. Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 22:44, August 22, 2011 (UTC)
- Okay, just checking.
- Sorry, that's all the info. Cal Jedi
Attack of the Clone
"Since this article is based in the time of the Galactic Empire, and The Force Unleashed II happens prior to the Rebellion era, this is based in the Rise of the Empire era." I'd suggest referring only to official publications (and not "this article") here, as it gives the reader the impression that there are no official sources to go by.- See how the IU thing works. If not, I'll change it around better. Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 16:09, September 5, 2011 (UTC)
- How is Skywalker relevant to The Force Unleashed II? It's still not very clear to the reader, who may or may not know the connection. I would suggest something like this: "Since Rebu lived during the time of the Galactic Empire, and since The Force Unleashed II happens prior to the Rebellion era, Rebu's lifetime is based in the Rise of the Empire era." Unless I'm missing something, Skywalker shouldn't have to be mentioned. CC7567 (talk) 18:26, September 5, 2011 (UTC)
- I was trying to find something to anchor the one end of my example, but I think your idea looks much better. Check it out now. Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 02:51, September 6, 2011 (UTC)
- I was trying to find something to anchor the one end of my example, but I think your idea looks much better. Check it out now. Cal Jedi
- How is Skywalker relevant to The Force Unleashed II? It's still not very clear to the reader, who may or may not know the connection. I would suggest something like this: "Since Rebu lived during the time of the Galactic Empire, and since The Force Unleashed II happens prior to the Rebellion era, Rebu's lifetime is based in the Rise of the Empire era." Unless I'm missing something, Skywalker shouldn't have to be mentioned. CC7567 (talk) 18:26, September 5, 2011 (UTC)
- See how the IU thing works. If not, I'll change it around better. Cal Jedi
- There were several grammar errors, minor but still significant, that were found in the article. Please take more time in the future to proofread and catch errors like those—it doesn't ever hurt to be more thorough than normal. CC7567 (talk) 05:15, September 5, 2011 (UTC)
- I'll try to watch that. Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 16:03, September 5, 2011 (UTC)
- I'll try to watch that. Cal Jedi
Moffship
Do we know for a fact that Rebu oversaw the field testing in 1 BBY, like the intro says? If so, the long explanation used in the TFUII reference can be removed.- I don't really know what you mean. The game doesn't explicitly say that it occured in 1 BBY, thus the long explanation.
- Then why does the intro say 1 BBY? Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 22:19, September 25, 2011 (UTC)
- Addressed.
- Then why does the intro say 1 BBY? Grand Moff Tranner
- I don't really know what you mean. The game doesn't explicitly say that it occured in 1 BBY, thus the long explanation.
I'd like to see the first sentence of the bio reworded. Long introductory clauses don't go well with very short sentences.- See if that looks any better.
- I've reworded it further to remove the unnecessary mention of Palpatine and to improve the flow. Let me know if this is okay with you before I strike this objection. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 22:19, September 25, 2011 (UTC)
- Looks good.
- I've reworded it further to remove the unnecessary mention of Palpatine and to improve the flow. Let me know if this is okay with you before I strike this objection. Grand Moff Tranner
- See if that looks any better.
Was the Nemesis gunship specifically designed for the Imperial Navy? I don't remember seeing that in its databank entry.- Good point.
- The P&T still mentions it was used specifically by the Imperial Navy, which I assume is incorrect since you removed the reference from the bio. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 22:19, September 25, 2011 (UTC)
- See if that looks any better than.
- The P&T still mentions it was used specifically by the Imperial Navy, which I assume is incorrect since you removed the reference from the bio. Grand Moff Tranner
- Good point.
Please replace one of the forms of "develop" in the last sentence of the bio's first paragraph.- Taken care of.
- I see no change. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 22:19, September 25, 2011 (UTC)
- My apologies. I must have had my eyes in backwards. :P--Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 23:28, September 25, 2011 (UTC)
- My apologies. I must have had my eyes in backwards. :P--Cal Jedi
- I see no change. Grand Moff Tranner
- Taken care of.
- That's all for now. Good job. Grand Moff Tranner (Comlink) 15:23, September 24, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for stopping by. :D --Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 20:22, September 25, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for stopping by. :D --Cal Jedi
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:17, September 30, 2011 (UTC)